I need the following sentence to be one sentence. Does this sentence flow okay and is punctuation correct? Is there a better way to word the following sentence? I am applying for the position of office manager of surgical services at Barnes Hospital that appeared in the Nursing News last Wednesday since broading by education in medical billing and coding; in addition, this job opportunity will allow me to demonstrate my confidence as a result of my last office manager position in a doctor's office.

This part does not make sense to me:

since broading by education in medical billing and coding

Perhaps instead of "confidence" you might like "proficiency?"

Do y ou think "office manager of surgical services" should be capitalized?

Try it all again? Simplify and just state clearly what you wish to say.

Sra

The sentence you provided can be rewritten for better flow and clarity. Here is a suggested revision:

"I am applying for the position of Office Manager of Surgical Services at Barnes Hospital, which was advertised in the Nursing News last Wednesday. This opportunity aligns perfectly with my educational background in medical billing and coding, and it also gives me a chance to showcase my confidence gained from my previous experience as an office manager in a doctor's office."

In this revised version, the sentence is broken down into two parts to improve readability. The first part introduces the job position and its source of advertisement. The second part elaborates on why the position is a good fit, mentioning the relevant educational background and previous experience.