Posted by jean on .
I need the following sentence to be one sentence. Does this sentence flow okay and is punctuation correct? Is there a better way to word the following sentence? I am applying for the position of office manager of surgical services at Barnes Hospital that appeared in the Nursing News last Wednesday since broading by education in medical billing and coding; in addition, this job opportunity will allow me to demonstrate my confidence as a result of my last office manager position in a doctor's office.
This part does not make sense to me:
since broading by education in medical billing and coding
Perhaps instead of "confidence" you might like "proficiency?"
Do y ou think "office manager of surgical services" should be capitalized?
Try it all again? Simplify and just state clearly what you wish to say.