posted by Anonymous on .
How can I fix this sentence?
If Julie willingly listens to my mom’s health concerns and provides emotional support, the patient would feel very satisfied with the nurse’s care, and her pain may lessen.
Is the patient your mom? If so, you need to keep the reference consistent -- refer to her either as the patient or as your mom -- all the way through the sentence.
Give it a try and see what you come up with.