Posted by Franco on Friday, September 10, 2010 at 11:08am.
1. "standing" "... around it, but there...."
2. "... with round balls. After a while, Marlow...."
3. "... Russian, who...." "Enlarged" might not be the best term. See Thesaurus.
4. Can get rid of 2 "so"s. "... take them down." "Away" makes it seem like he might keep the skulls in another location.
5. Unclear referent.
6. "talents were" or "talent was." Delete "sort of." Can use "seemed like."
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