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March 30, 2015

Homework Help: English

Posted by Jon. on Saturday, June 26, 2010 at 7:08pm.

I'm writing an essay and I'm wondering which sentence is better to be used in an essay.
My teacher said that the sentence, "Sitting on his bed, Lamar sadly thought about his grandfather's death." is better than the sentence, "Lamar, saddened by his noble and honored grandfather's death, flung himself mournfully on his bed, sobbing." But I don't understand why...

And now I have a question if I should use the sentence"Looking dejected, Juan slumped in the time-out chair by the class door" or "Juan sat on the chair by the door." on my essay. I guess the former one is better, right?

Please help out. Thank You.

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