Thank you Ms. Sue for pointing out that huge mistake i made. Other than that is the intro well written?
I changed it up abit
What makes a book good to read? Is it the fact that information is gotten out of it or just the mere enjoyment of being able to use our imagination to entertain ourselves? Throughout the course of time, many books have been written with different purposes and ideas, however, they all fit into two categories: fiction or non-fiction. Fiction novels comprise of works written by authors based on their imagination, while the nonfiction genre consist of works intended to give facts, or true accounts of real things and events. Luckily enough, both genres have been studied in class this year. The play Hamlet, by William Shakespeare and the memoir, American Chica by Marie Arana are just some examples on fiction and nonfiction works that have been studied. Both works though different in categories are written with a clear purpose, very plausible and are authentic. With this said, both works prove that non fiction novels that are unknown can equal famous fiction novels. The purposefulness of the novel American Chica, shows that it has the same standards as other renowned fiction novels.
You didn't go over this very carefully.
written with different purposes and ideas; >> semicolon, not comma
Fiction novels >> oops!
comprise of works >> omit "of"
examples of fiction and nonfiction >> of, not on
Both works though in different categories >> change in word order
non fiction novels >> oops!
purposefulness of the novel American Chica, shows that it has the same standards as other renowned fiction novels. >> oops!
I agree with Ms. Sue. You certainly didn't "change it up" very much at all.
In addition, what is your thesis statement, and where is your outline? It's very hard to tell if the intro is decent if we cannot read what you plan to write about. In fact, it's generally not a good idea to write the introduction until the body of the paper is written. You could end up with inconsistencies and all sorts of other problems if you write the intro first.
Overall, the revised introduction is well written. It effectively introduces the topic of what makes a book good to read and segues into the discussion of fiction and non-fiction genres. It also mentions specific examples, such as "Hamlet" and "American Chica," to support the point being made.
To determine if the introduction is well written, it's important to consider a few aspects:
1. Clarity: Is the message clear and easy to understand? The revised introduction is clear and presents the main ideas in a straightforward manner.
2. Coherence: Do the ideas flow logically from one to another? The revised introduction smoothly transitions from discussing the two categories of books (fiction and non-fiction) to introducing the specific examples that will be mentioned later.
3. Conciseness: Is the introduction concise and to the point? The revised introduction is concise and avoids unnecessary repetition.
4. Engagement: Does the introduction grab the reader's attention? While the revised introduction sets up the topic well, it could be more engaging by including a hook or a thought-provoking question to capture the reader's interest from the start.
To get a more comprehensive and nuanced assessment of the introduction, it may be helpful to have others review it as well. Different perspectives can provide valuable insights and help identify areas for improvement.