Should United States government policy favor certain kinds of immigrants? I do feel the government of the United States should favor any kind of immigrants.<~~this sentence doesn't make sense This country was built on all different kinds of people, nationality, and religion.<~~the word "people" is plural, so make "nationality" and "religion" plural to match Who are we to say who gets to come over and who don’t.<~~... and who doesn't (needs singular form); also needs a question mark at the end of this I think the applications the government makes immigrants fill out it<~~delete "it" and insert a verb a good thing because that’s how they<~~who are "they"? can decide<~~can decide what?; they<~~who? can bring over the ones that are willing to help make a different<~~use "difference" (noun), not "different" (adj) in our country, not someone that<~~use "who" not "that" when referring to people wants a free ride.
Should citizenship preference be given to the neediest applicants? The most talented? The most oppressed? The richest? On the most talented and the most rich, I would have to say no. I don’t believe being rich, talented, smartest, or any thing<~~sp? else has anything to do with getting a<~~delete "a" citizenship. Know<~~this doesn't make sense with the neediest, I would have to say yes, well some what yes.<~~this is something of a run-on If there is a mother or father that has a family<~~delete "a" over here,<~~move this comma to AFTER the closing parentheses~~> (like their<~~pronoun/antecedent mismatch spouse or children) then yes, a citizenship preference should be given. I think keeping their family together is important.
Should applications from certain countries be given priority? Yes, I do agree on this to a point. I believe in the phrase “First Come First Served”,<~~put comma before the end quotation mark but if we didn’t give other countries priority at time then we will have more immigrants then others.<~~these two sentences don't make sense We need to even out the immigration population.<~~"even out" in terms of what?
There are so many errors in the following, I'd be doing you no favors to continue as if with a fine-toothed comb -- you need to start finding them yourself!
If the government didn’t do priority than no one else would get to come. They can’t just let 500 European come over before the Irish just because they where on the list first. I think it would be good to choose so many from each country each time to be fair.
Please go over your paper with the following in mind. Thanks to PsyDAG for the following:
In the future, if nobody is available to proofread your work, you can do this yourself. After writing your material, put it aside for a day — at least several hours. (This breaks mental sets you might have that keep you from noticing problems.) Then read it aloud as if you were reading someone else's work. (Reading aloud slows down your reading, so you are less likely to skip over problems.)
[You can also either read it aloud to someone else or have someone else read it aloud to you! (The latter works really well!)]
If your reading goes smoothly, that is fine. However, wherever you "stumble" in your reading, other people are likely to have a problem in reading your material. Those "stumbles" indicate areas that need revising.
Once you have made your revisions, repeat the process above. Good papers often require many drafts.
And here are three really good websites that will help, too.
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