Is this alright as my 'hooking' beginning?

Question

Is this alright as my 'hooking' beginning?

We find it mixed in our food on the shelves in the supermarket, we find it growing in a plot down the lane, test field release sites with genetically engineered seed, sugar beet, wheat, potato, strawberries and more. It is variously known as genetic engineering, which is a technology in which the genome of a living cell is modified for medical or industrial use. It’s used in our everyday life in agriculture, medicine, and industry.

-MC

Answer 1

That's a good hook -- IF you cut it in half. As a hook, it's too long. I got tired of reading half way through.

Answer 2

We find it mixed in our food on the shelves in the supermarket and growing in a plot down the lane. It is variously known as genetic engineering, which is a technology in which the genome of a living cell is modified for medical or industrial use. It’s used in our everyday life in agriculture, medicine, and industry. The question is: Is it a blessing, or a threat? [thesis]

Better? And is my thesis alright?

-MC

Answer 3

For your thesis, you need to decide which side of the question you support.

Answer 4

Tough decision..

-MC

Answer 5

Yes, your beginning can be considered a "hooking" beginning as it captures the reader's attention by discussing a potentially controversial and thought-provoking subject - genetic engineering. It introduces the topic by mentioning its presence in our food, its use in different crops, and its various applications in agriculture, medicine, and industry. This opening sets the stage for further exploration and discussion of genetic engineering and its implications.