Posted by Tharima on Monday, April 12, 2010 at 7:22pm.
Sorry* Is this a better thesis ?
Still too much.
End the sentence after hormones.
Honestly ! What would you advise me to stick to at this point . Because I have attempted writing atleast 5 thesis statements and I am dreaded !!
If I go about the statement I put above I do not have enough sources to defend my argument either .
Please do advise
or...
Various approaches to prevent steroids in sports have not bin successful because athletes are now using hard to detect growth hormones which calls for a analysis of better approaches
I hope you are patient with me .
Sure -- I'm patient. :-)
I suggest you stick with this:
Various approaches to prevent steroids in sports have not been successful because athletes are now using hard-to-detect growth hormones.
I hope I do well on this paper because writing this thesis was the hardest.
Thanks for all your help I really do appreciate it !!
You're very welcome. I'm sure you'll do well on this paper.
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