Posted by Tharima on Monday, April 12, 2010 at 6:49pm.
I think it sounds fine truley!
Your thesis statement is too long and broad.
Check these sites for tips for writing thesis statements.
http://www.unc.edu/depts/wcweb/handouts/thesis.html
http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/545/01/
So should I say .
An analysis on different methods to ban steroids in sports brings a challenge to the sports industry: drug testing before and after games hasn't changed the number of athletes who secretively use the type of steroids which cannot be detected.
That's o.k. I assume your paper will explore the secret use of steroids that cannot be detected.
Hmm! What evidence do you have that that's true?
Well Growth Hormones have become relatively hard to detect because we make them within our bodies.
which is what I found out through research
Originally I was trying to find out what is the better method to prevent steroids in sports because I already had many sources which have researched the different approaches to discouraging using steroids...
but I just did not know how to word it..
As a result I came out with various arguments
..
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