Posted by Franco on Sunday, March 7, 2010 at 6:32am.
#1 -- I'd use "He" rather than "It" since a narrator is almost always a person and you have used "he" later in the sentence.
#2 -- Using "through" is not correct. Your original sentence is fine as it is.
#3 -- Use "occurred" instead of "took place" and delete everything in parentheses.
#4 -- Comma after "Caesar"
#5 -- Delete the wording in parentheses.
#6 -- He and his soldiers returned to defend Rome...
Because a narrator is NOT an "it" You may say - The story may also be told by a voice outside,,,,,,
2. Yes.
3. 47 AD during the rule of..
5. by force would be correct.
6. to face up to - is awkward.
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