posted by Franco on .
Can someone help me check these sentences,please? Thank you in advance.
1)His fingers produced a music similar to (can I use "like") the sound blown into a glass.
2)A simile is a stated comparison between two things through (and not "with") the use of connective words.
3) A euphemism is the substitution of an inoffensice term for (or "with") one which is considered to be inoffensive.
4) At the beginning the wind's appearance suprises the woman, but at the end, when it left her alone, she is sad of its departure.
5) The woman is worried about her aging process (or about growing old?)
6) The poet talks about (or refers to) the sounds of the town in the evening, namely that of the cab horse and that of the shoes on the ground.
7) "The wind tapped like a tired man".The poetess compares the tapping of the wind to that of a tired man. (?)
8) The mirror presents itself (or introduces itself?) as an objective thing, that reflects images without preconceptions. It turns into a faithful judge (?) of the woman that looks at herself in it.
9) Can you say "a hunting based population" instead of a population that lived on hunting?
1 - 3 -- delete all in parentheses
2 = A simile is a comparison between two unlike things; the use of "like" or "as" is standard.
4 = very confusing. Add comma after "beginning," check all spelling, and insert "because" before "of."
5 -- The woman is worried about growing old.
6 -- The poet imitates the sounds of the town...
7 is OK, but put a space after the period, and use the word "poet" not "poetess."
8 -- The mirror presents itself as an object that reflects images...
9 -- Yes, you can, but be sure to hyphenate the two words being turned into an adjective: hunting-based...