Earlier Yesterday. I was talking to Bobpursely,Writeacher,Ms. Sue and more i think. We were talking about my essay what was the impact of the Industrial Revolution. One of you told me to write an outline. Well this is a start. Can you tell me if it is good. And make suggestions. Thanks

Title:What was the impact of the Industrial Revolution

. Introduction A. Background and Thesis statement. If you do not know the impact of the Industrial revolution, you will not understand anything in this essay. This topic is very good to study because you know about the different views. By the end of the essay you will understand that life was different before the Revolution and after. You will know that not all the changes took place immediately, the changed occurred at different speeds. There are also areas that did not change.

Subtopic: Before the Industrial Revolution

. News was spread by travellers or through messengers goods. 1. there were no cars, buses or aeroplanes. People had to rely upon themselves and their communities to provide the things that they needed. Food was produced locally, agriculture could provide for but a few towns. Clothing was also made locally.

2. Before the Industrial revolution were there any issues with the Polictical,Social,Economic and Technogical areas? B. There weren’t as many problems with people and their social life.The working class had a few rights and children worked in pretty good conditions. They were housed well. Child labour existed before the Industrial revolution; it dates back to prehistoric times. They felt that they were helping the poor working class children to work from the age of five years onward. Children were working at night and hardly got to see their parents. Life was a constant battle. Education was poor; the rich had several advantages such as Private tutors and Nannies.

1. Politics was based upon land ownership. The population was growing which meant that the feudal system was long gone. People were relying on each other and their master. 2. Subtopic First Point Supporting Evidence Supporting Evidence Second Point Supporting Evidence Supporting Evidence

It looks as if you're already writing the rough draft!! This isn't an outline, though.

Take a look here: http://i.ehow.com/images/a02/0p/ra/construct-five-paragraph-essay-800X800.jpg

An outline is like a skeleton, in a way. You organize the main facts and supporting details you need WITHOUT WRITING FULL SENTENCES AND PARAGRAPHS in order to see at a glance how you plan to organize your thoughts.

Please just give us the skeleton.

Overall, your outline is a good start, but there are a few suggestions I can provide to improve it:

1. Introduction:
- Your introduction provides a good background and thesis statement. However, I would recommend rephrasing your thesis statement to make it more concise and specific. Instead of saying "This topic is very good to study because you know about the different views," try to clearly state the main argument or perspective you will be exploring in your essay.

2. Subtopic: Before the Industrial Revolution:
- Consider expanding this section to provide more information about the specific characteristics of the pre-industrial era. You mention the spread of news, local production of goods, and the lack of transportation options, but you can further elaborate on how these factors influenced daily life, communication, and economic activities.
- Additionally, you can mention the social hierarchy and the feudal system as key components of the pre-industrial society.

3. Subtopic: Issues before the Industrial Revolution:
- This section starts with a good question, but it would be helpful to have a clear thesis statement at the beginning to guide the reader.
- Instead of combining all four areas (political, social, economic, and technological) into one paragraph, consider dedicating a paragraph to each area. This will help organize your thoughts and make it easier for readers to follow.
- Support your statements with specific examples and evidence. For example, when discussing the working class and child labor conditions, provide concrete examples that illustrate the challenges they faced and how it affected their lives.
- Lastly, connect this section back to the main topic by explaining how these issues and challenges set the stage for the need for change during the Industrial Revolution.

4. Supporting Evidence:
- In the outline, you mention "Supporting Evidence" for the first and second points. It would be helpful to provide specific evidence or examples under each point to support your arguments. This will add credibility to your essay and help readers understand your points more effectively.

Remember, an outline serves as a roadmap for your essay. It should provide a clear structure and guide your writing. Make sure to revise and refine your outline as you continue to research and develop your essay.