Is this better?

If you do not know the impact of the Industrial revolution, you will not understand anything in this essay. By the end of the essay you will understand that life was different before the Revolution and after. You will know that not all the changes took place immediately, the changed occurred at different speeds. There are also areas that did not change.

Is there anything in there that is your own opinion about the topic?

YOUR OPINION (your position/stance) is what a thesis statement is all about. What do YOU THINK about the topic??