Posted by Sara on Sunday, February 28, 2010 at 8:59pm.
Do you mean the ring cost $500.00? If so, you need to add the $ sign in the sentence. Also the next clause should be "of which she was proud."
Check the spelling of "wasn't" -- use "until" instead of "till" (which means a place storekeepers keep money or to plow the earth) -- with "returned" in the sentence, delete "back" -- the rest is fine.
A girl went to a night club wearing her $500.00 ring of which she was proud of. The ring was loose on her finger and fell off. It wasn't noticed until the next day when the heart-broken girl made a reprt to the police. She returned to the night club and saw something glinting on the ground. There lay her undamaged ring.
Is this good?
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