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Is Patient Diplomacy the Best Approach to Iran’s Nuclear Program?

Yes, a patient diplomacy is the best approach to Iran’s nuclear program. Professor Christopher Hemmer from the Department of International Security Studies at Maxwell Air Force Base, Montgomery, Alabama argues that although Iran’s nuclear program will cause challenges for the United States, they can be met through active strategy of deterrence, containment, and engagement. The United States interests in Iran are too high and should not be threaten by forcing Iran through military action to abandon the development of nuclear weapons.
Oil, in the Persian Gulf is a major interest for The United States. Maintaining the oil flow into America is essentially important due to our dependency of it. The United States cannot jeopardize the possibility of creating a hostile relationship with Iran. A military hit forcing Iran to abandon nuclear weapons will only minimize the oil production coming into America and at the same time affect the overall market. Undoubtedly, Iran does rely heavily on the profits from oil exports and therefore will not stop or hold back petroleum from global markets, but they can however, threaten to disrupt the flow of traffic or raise the price of oil. This will ultimately affect the United States economy, and essentially the global market.

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Direct military action against Iran would only agitate the Middle East particularly Islamic governed countries. Disturbing this region would damage America’s interest towards the fight against terrorism. Consequently, increasing the threat of terrorist’s attacks against the United States and its allies. Military action would also encourage movements of support and unity for the current regime in Iran, thus further indoctrinating Anti-American influence.

In addition, Iraq and Afghanistan are important interests to the United States. Preventing Iran from a nuclear program through military force would encourage Iran, to retaliate by making things difficult for the United States. The current attempt of nation building in both countries cannot be undermined through Iran creating challenges to block U.S. efforts. The United States cannot afford a regime change in Iran. Hence, its current resources are allocated in Afghanistan and Iraq.
Nevertheless, the United States efforts should not include eliminating Iran’s regime. Not because the United State lacks the capability of eliminating a regime like in Iraq, but rather the needed resources to do so are much higher. Thus, Hemmer explains that Iran is much larger and in some way a more nationalistic nation than Iraq. An obligation like that goes beyond America’s resources. Eliminating the regime is not the challenge. However, installing a new government is an expensive test. In addition, the United States military action for regime change is extremely more dangerous in Iran than in Iraq.
Indeed, a military approach against the regime can in fact induce Iran to use its nuclear weapons, against the United States in order to defend itself from regime overthrow. Even so, Hemmer exclaims that it is now common within the international community that once a government acquires nuclear weapons, regime change by an external actor is no longer an option. Hence, the risk is too high. Iran then would even feel justified as regards to its last hope for survival under United States invasion

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The best approach to Iran's nuclear program is patient diplomacy. Professor Christopher Hemmer from the Department of International Security Studies at Maxwell Air Force Base, Montgomery, Alabama argues that while Iran's nuclear program presents challenges for the United States, these challenges can be addressed through a strategy of deterrence, containment, and engagement. It is important for the United States to maintain its interests in Iran, especially concerning the flow of oil from the Persian Gulf. As the United States is heavily dependent on oil, it cannot afford to risk creating a hostile relationship with Iran through military action to force them to abandon their nuclear program. Such military action would lead to a decrease in oil production coming into America and impact the overall market. While Iran relies on profits from oil exports and would unlikely stop or hold back petroleum from global markets, they could disrupt traffic or raise the price of oil as a form of retaliation. This would have negative consequences for the United States economy and the global market as a whole. Therefore, patient diplomacy is the most effective approach to address Iran's nuclear program.