Grammar and Composition
posted by y912f on .
I don't know if anybody remembers, but a long time ago I was working on a pet peeve speech for this course and a lot of the tutors helped me finish it up. There was a second part to it that I never got to do, I would like to finish that up now.
There were some requirements for the speech too, such as:
the intro has to motivate audience, and state topic in thesis statement
the body has to organize the main points in a logical pattern which the audience could follow and give supporting info for the main points
the conclusion has to summarize main points, and end with a strong interesting idea(clincher)
time limit (speech has to be recorded): 5 minutes
note cards: contained notes, not sentences and paragraphs; speech neatly outlined on note cards.
so basically i want help on the last part; note cards. my speech is finished but i don't understand how i can summarize it on the note cards
My speech was about my little sister, here it is:
There are some people in this world that you can't live without, and then there are some other people who you just can't bear to live with That second category is the one that I have to deal with all day, everyday. Sure she's a few years younger than I, so what? Does that make her any more special than me, or the rest of us? Why is it that she gets all this treatment that we never received? My sister not only irritates me to a great extent, but she also makes some of my worst nightmares come true.
When it's finally time for the little monster to get up from her twelve-hour beauty sleep, she disappears in to the bathroom, leaving the cluttered bed untouched. Does she seriously expect some maid to come tidy that up for her? It's bad enough that my parents make me share a room with such a pig; I can't believe they want me to start doing her dirty work for her too. The division between the room is clear; my side and her side. And predictably the difference is clear too; my side is organized, good-looking, and spotless, while Princess Piggy's side is compared to a barn; messy, cluttered, and even smelly at times. This morning I though I spotted uneaten food on the floor turning grey, and other unspeakable things.
After the whole room is spick and span, it's time to start home-schooling for the day. It is at this time every morning when I come in to the computer room to find HER hogging up the only working computer. This is unbelievable! How am I supposed to catch up on my work, when every day she is sitting here before me not even working? When I command the little brat to get off, her only reply is " I was here before you so you can't make me get off. Try waking up earlier!" Is this some kind of joke? I was, and always am, awake before her; most of my time goes away in fixing up that jungle of a room. It seems like I've done some major sin without realizing it and SHE is my own personal punishment for that unknown sin. What could I have ever done to deserve this?
Ok, I have to keep telling myself that the worst of the day is over. She gets off of the computer around 6 o'clock; I can try to get some work done before dinner time. I'm not caught by surprise when the phone in my room starts ringing; one of my closest friends was supposed to call so we could discuss the party that was coming up. I dash inside my room, tripping and stumbling a few times, because I know that wherever she is she has also heard the phone ring. The phone call with my friend was almost coming to an end and I was shocked that there was no sign of the demon, more importantly I was grateful for that because my friend had started discussing some of the personal details of the party that were a secret between me and her only. I hung up and was feeling appreciative of my sister for not trying to over hear our conversation. As I stepped into the kitchen downstairs, there she was, with a huge grin on her face, and the cordless phone in her had, and I knew that she was listening to every word we had just discussed.
To sum up my points, sometimes I feel like my sister is one fo the worst things that happened to me. However, there are times when I realize that, even though she drives me nuts, she is-and always will be-my sister. Moreover, deep down, no matter how deep it actually is, I do love her. We will be sisters for a long time to come, and for that we're going to to have to start learning to get along with each other. Hopefully there will be a time that is different from now. Eventually, we will both grow up, and look back at how much we BOTH changed.
so i basically don't get how i can put this on note cards. here's specifically what the assignment says:
"Use this as a guideline and transfer your ideas to note cards. Remember, note cards have an outline of your notes on them, not sentences."
For the first note card, I'd write the following for the first paragraph:
can live without
not more special than me
gets treatment we don't get
irritates and biggest nightmare
oh ok, that helps a LOT! Thank you. let me write that down, then I'll try to figure out what I should do for the second paragraph, and I'll post it on here.
so for the second one, this is what I would do:
leaves bed untouched
share room and do her chores
room: my side organized, her side dirty
dirty things on the floor
Is that ok?
hoggs the computers
doesn't leave when i tell her to
i get some work done
phone rings, run to get it
private discussion on the phone
go downstairs and find her eavesdropping
even though there are fights we're family
i love her
should start to get along
there will be change
Also, I was wondering, the next step is to record my speech and it has to be 5 minutes long. So do I record it by reading off of my speech, or by looking at the note cards?
You should record it just looking on your note cards. It may take a few times til you get it the way you want, but that's what you'd do if you were giving your speech in front of a group of people.