thank you. still needs work with punctuation. i really don't even know how long these individual paragraphs are to be in sentences.
a stocky build (not stocking!!)
What's an RPN? Are you sure your reader will automatically know what that is?
thinks positively about (not positive at)
"Mel likes darts, football, and spending time..." <~~delete "spending" to make sure your series is composed of all nouns (that's known as parallel construction)
daughter whom (not daughter that) -- her daughter is a person, not a thing.
comma after "summer"
its, not it's (which means "it is")
"on those lonely days we don't spend our quality time with each other" <~~delete "lonely" and add "when" after "days" -- also delete "our"
In the last sentence, change "but" to "and" -- and insert a comma after "friend" and insert "I" after "and"
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