I have to write perssavie essay on fear and destruction in which some common street drug has created among gang violence , schools , families, workforce and institutions with in our community .
I am having a hard time developing a thesis statement and a topic for this type of essay.
The thesis statement that I submitted to my instructor is : The illegal use of drugs has created destruction among individuals . The topic I decided on is " Fear and Destruction " .
My instructor said I need to develop a different thesis and topic.
Can you please help me with this ?
Thank you so much .
English - Writeacher, Wednesday, January 20, 2010 at 3:34pm
The problem with your thesis statement is that it just states facts. You need to add YOU into this statement -- what YOU think about your topic.
Read through all the examples here -- and their corrections. Then rewrite your thesis statement.
Repost when you're ready.