Mrs Sue,

I have to write perssavie essay on fear and destruction in which some common street drug has created among gang violence , schools , families, workforce and institutions with in our community .

I am having a hard time developing a thesis statement and a topic for this type of essay.

The thesis statement that I submitted to my instructor is : The illegal use of drugs has created destruction among individuals . The topic I decided on is " Fear and Destruction " .

My instructor said I need to develop a different thesis and topic.

Can you please help me with this ?
Thank you so much .

The problem with your thesis statement is that it just states facts. You need to add YOU into this statement -- what YOU think about your topic.

http://leo.stcloudstate.edu/acadwrite/thesistatement.html
Read through all the examples here -- and their corrections. Then rewrite your thesis statement.

Repost when you're ready.

Certainly! I can help you develop a new thesis statement and topic for your persuasive essay on fear and destruction caused by a common street drug within your community. When working on a thesis statement, it's important to make sure it is clear, specific, and arguable. Here's a suggestion for a revised thesis statement:

"The proliferation of [specific street drug] has fueled a culture of fear and devastation throughout our community, leading to an alarming rise in gang violence, compromised school environments, shattered families, a weakened workforce, and the erosion of vital societal institutions."

In this revised thesis statement, we have specified the street drug you are focusing on and provided a clearer understanding of the havoc it has wreaked. Now, let's think about a new topic:

Topic: "Confronting the Epidemic: The Toll of [specific street drug] on Our Community"

With this topic, you can explore the various ways in which the drug has impacted different aspects of your community, such as gang violence, schools, families, the workforce, and institutions. Remember to support your arguments with evidence and examples throughout your essay.

I hope this helps! If you have any further questions, feel free to ask. Good luck with your essay!