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The book "We are all welcome here” by Elizabeth Berg relates to the time era of Elvis Presley and his home town. The narrator and the protagonist of the book is a 14 year old girl named Dianna Dunn. In my opinion, she has similar characteristics that could relate to students in Grade 10 of today through her personality traits, her emotions and experiences and her empathetic lifestyle deserves to be supported. Dianna’s personality depicts a headstrong girl who likes the teenagers of today, wants to be respected. Her discussion with her African- American caretaker supports this opinion with the following conversation”You can't spank me anymore, Peacie," I said. "I'm too old." "You too old, you say." "Yes, I am." "Well, I'll tell you what. (Berg, pg.75). Also, her personality of admiring boys with her passion for make up and clothes is the typical lifestyle of Grade 10 students of today too. Dianna’s emotional problems started from separated parents to
financial crisis that causes her to feel insecure. In today’s society, many Grade 10 students lack self confidence, mostly originated from family and financial problems. An ongoing issue, which is also portrayed in the book, is experiences of race and class discrimination. Dianna’s role is realistic and could be related to in today’s lifestyle. She deserves empathy since her problems were not created by her, but existed from her birth.  In conclusion, Dianna’s personality, emotions and experiences together with her empathetic traits are similar to Grade 10 students of today’s society.

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The book "We are all welcome here” by Elizabeth Berg relates to the time era of Elvis Presley and his home town. The narrator and the protagonist of the book is a 14 year old girl named Dianna Dunn. In my opinion, she has similar characteristics that could (be) relate (d)to students in G (caps?)rade 10 of today through her personality traits, her emotions and experiences(,) and her empathetic lifestyle deserves to be supported(this last part is confusing). Dianna’s personality depicts a headstrong girl who (,)likes(not plural) the teenagers of today, wants to be respected. Her discussion with her African- American caretaker supports this opinion (get rid of opinion, its not necessary) with the following conversation(need a space)”()'You can't spank me anymore, Peacie,"(only a single') I said. (same throughout when a character is speeking)"I'm too old." "You too old, you say." "Yes, I am." "Well, I'll tell you what.(should be a comma)(") (Berg, pg.75). Also, her personality (trait) of admiring boys with her passion for make up and clothes is the typical lifestyle of Grade 10 students(girls, not students) of today too. Dianna’s emotional problems started from separated parents to
financial crisis that(not necessary word) causes her to feel insecure. In today’s society, many Grade 10 students lack self confidence, mostly(not necessary word) originated(present tense) from family(familial) and financial problems. An ongoing issue, which is also portrayed in the book, is experiences of race and class discrimination. Dianna’s role is realistic and could be related to in(not necessay) today’s lifestyle. She deserves empathy since her problems were not created by her, but existed from her birth. In conclusion,(sounds cheesy) Dianna’s personality, emotions and experiences together(combined) with her empathetic traits are similar to (thoses posessed by the)Grade 10 students of today’s society

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The book COMMA "We are all welcome hereCOMMA” (BOOK TITLES UNDERLINED OR IN ITALICS WITH CAPS FOR MOST TITLE WORDS.) by Elizabeth Berg relates to the time era (USE OF BOTH TIME AND ERA REDUNDANT. DELETE ONE.) of Elvis Presley and ("IN"?) his home town. The narrator and the protagonist of the book is a 14DASHyearDASHold girl named Dianna Dunn. In my opinion, she has similar characteristics ("...CHARACTERISTICS SIMILAR TO STUDENTS IN...." that could relate to students in Grade 10 of today (START NEW SENTENCE HERE.) through her personality traits, her emotions and experiences and her empathetic lifestyle deserves to be supported. Dianna’s personality depicts a ("DIANNA IS A HEADSTRONG GIRL....")headstrong girl COMMA who likes ("LIKE") the teenagers of today, wants to be respected. Her discussion with her African- American caretaker supports this opinion ("...OPINION: 'YOU CAN'T....") with the following conversation (COLON)

NEW PARAGRAPHS INDICATE CHANGES IN PLACE, TIME, IDEAS OR SPEAKERS.)

”You can't spank me anymore, Peacie," I said. "I'm too old."

"You too old, you say."

"Yes, I am."

"Well, I'll tell you what. (Berg, pg.75). (EITHER ELIMINATE THIS LAST QUOTE OR INDICATE WHAT THE "WHAT" IS. SINCE THE ONE BOOK IS YOUR ONLY SOURCE OF DATA, YOU DON'T HAVE TO INCLUDE THE AUTHOR'S NAME.)

Also, her personality of admiring ("...HER ADMIRATION OF BOYS....") boys ('ALONG") with her passion for make up and clothes is ("ARE") typical of Grade 10 students of today too. ("TOO" IS REDUNDANT WITH "ALSO". DELETE ONE.) Dianna’s emotional problems started ("RANGE"?) from separated parents to ("A"?) financial crisis that causes ("CAUSE") her to feel insecure.

In today’s society, many Grade 10 students lack self confidence, mostly originated from ("...MOSTLY CAUSED BY FAMILY....') family and financial problems. An ongoing issue, which is also portrayed in the book, is experiences of race and class discrimination. Dianna’s role is realistic and could be related to today’s lifestyle. She deserves empathy COMMA since her problems were not created by her, but existed from her birth.

In conclusion, Dianna’s personality, emotions, empathetic traits and experiences are similar to Grade 10 students of today’s society.

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The paragraph appears to be a supported opinion paragraph discussing how the protagonist of the book "We are all welcome here" named Dianna Dunn relates to the characteristics and experiences of Grade 10 students today.

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The book "We are all welcome here" by Elizabeth Berg relates to the time era of Elvis Presley and his hometown. The narrator and protagonist of the book is a 14-year-old girl named Dianna Dunn. In my opinion, Dianna possesses characteristics that students in Grade 10 today can relate to. Her strong-willed personality, desire for respect, and conversation with her African-American caretaker exemplify her determination to be treated as an equal. She demonstrates a typical Grade 10 lifestyle by admiring boys, expressing her passion for makeup, and being conscious of her appearance. Dianna also faces emotional challenges, such as dealing with separated parents and financial instability, which are prevalent among many Grade 10 students today. Moreover, the book addresses issues of race and class discrimination, depicting a realistic portrayal of Dianna's experiences that can be related to in today's society. Empathy towards Dianna is warranted as she did not create her problems; they existed from her birth. In conclusion, Dianna's personality, emotions, and experiences, along with her empathetic traits, resemble those of Grade 10 students in today's society.

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