posted by jake .
this is an intro for an argumentative essay, the thesis for the essay is supposed to be that empires are bad..i need help in bringing that out better ( will be forever happy if it rewritten)
empires are needed and inevitable. These people would be considered ultra-nationalist. Others believe that empires are dangerous and cause many unnecessary wars. These people are deemed internationalist as they are trying to promote global peace. Clearly, the ultra-nationalism of building an empire is wrong and should be avoided.
I don't understand.
Why is your first sentence favorable to empires when your thesis states the opposite?
Start over again. Perhaps your first sentence could be something like: Empires are dangerous and cause many unnecessary wars.
for the essay we got a source we were supposed to talk about the good and bad points for building empires and then pick a side