Posted by jake on Wednesday, December 30, 2009 at 2:12pm.
i need this essay proofread please
thesis is that the building of empires is bad
You need to re-think that first sentence in light of your thesis.
You need to get rid of all instances of "you" throughout the paper.
nationalist = singular
nationalists = plural
internationalist = singular
internationalists = plural
This isn't an essay yet. Here's the pattern for an essay:
1. Intro paragraph, thesis statement at the end.
2. First main point to support thesis statement -- and explanation about this main point.
3. Second main point to support thesis statement -- and explanation about this main point.
4. Third main point to support thesis statement -- and explanation about this main point.
5. Conclusion paragraph
for our essay body paragraphs we are supposed to talk about the what the other side argues and then trash it
sorry for not telling you, but i was not don't yet.... i am sorry
So ... you're writing an argument!
Go into Argumentative Essays on this website, and use all the ideas they give you.
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