posted by Kelly on .
Can someone please check the grammar in these last two for me. I posted this about 8:00 and no one ever answered. I do understand that you are helping other individuals to. Your help is greatly appreciated.
The tension that Irene has towards Bellew shows that she does not appreciate the fact that he is an racist individual, who does not take other people's feelings into perspective when he talks.
When all is said and done, Larsen's theme goes to prove that it does not matter how people interact with each other openly, but it is how people feel in their minds that matters most.
The first one is wordy, but generally OK. Delete the comma after "individual."
The second one is fine ... a bit wordy, but fine.