Posted by Unknown on Thursday, November 5, 2009 at 3:03pm.
Any ideas on how to make my thesis stronger or how to change it. My paper is going to be on jacksonian democracy principles, election of 1824, election of 1828, Peggy Eaton Affair, Indian Policy (Worcester vs. Georgia, Trail of tears, Nullification Crisis/Force Act), and the Bank War.
This is the thesis i have. The Jacksonian Era was known as the "The Common Man" and to live up to that, Jackson was willing to fight any challenge that he was faced with.
- History/Ms.Sue - GuruBlue, Thursday, November 5, 2009 at 3:07pm
A suggestion was already made regarding that thesis statement.
- History/Ms.Sue - Unknown, Thursday, November 5, 2009 at 3:13pm
Yes. I'm aware that the suggestion that I got today was to put Andrew Jackson in the thesis. I do appreciate it. I just wanted to make sure my thesis fit for what I was writing about. Thank You
- History/Ms.Sue - Ms. Sue, Thursday, November 5, 2009 at 3:13pm
I agree with Writeacher and GuruBlue about what you need to add to your thesis. Be sure to include his full name and title.
- History/Ms.Sue - bobpursley, Thursday, November 5, 2009 at 3:14pm
On note on your content: If you are going to write on Jacksonian democracy principles, the Trail of Tears will be difficult to assimilate into that. It was not, looking back, a complement to Andrew Jackson's legacy.
I agree with the previous comments on your proposed thesis.
- History/Ms.Sue - GuruBlue, Thursday, November 5, 2009 at 3:16pm
That is a good introductory sentence, but not a good thesis statement. The thesis statement should incorporate the specific areas you wish to prove or explore.
Check this site. It is as clear as possible on good thesis statement writing.
- History/Ms.Sue - Unknown, Thursday, November 5, 2009 at 3:20pm
Thank You. So what I take from all of your posts is that it's good and to just add his name. Or do I do what GuruBlue said.
- History/Ms.Sue - Writeacher, Thursday, November 5, 2009 at 3:28pm
Do what GuruBlue says. And look at this webpage, too -- note how each poorly written statement was revised into a good thesis statement:
- History/Ms.Sue - Unknown, Thursday, November 5, 2009 at 3:51pm
Does this sound better.
Andrew Jackson's presidency was very nortorious for his democracy principles, election of 1824, election of 1828, Peggy Eaton Affair, Indian Policy, and the war against the United States.
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