please someone help with me personal narrtive.i'm on my second pargrah.my first pargraph was about waking up me getting up.I have an idea i,m going to write it about me going on the airplane and me going on the ship
writing - Dean, Tuesday, October 27, 2009 at 11:36pm
Please tell us what you need help on.
writing - alyssa, Tuesday, October 27, 2009 at 11:45pm
Me and family got on an air plane and we had go on a plane to seattle .Then we went on a bus to go sailing on a ship .Can you tell me how to improve this pargaph.
writing - lyne, Tuesday, October 27, 2009 at 11:55pm
First a paragraph should be 4-5 sentences. Try breaking up your ideas and adding details.
For exapmle, when you say you and your family got on a plane to Seattle, tell about what time you left, what it was like, how long it took, or any other detail. Do the same for your other sentence.
writing intoductoryparag - yvette, Tuesday, November 17, 2009 at 8:10pm
using describingatime of day topic sentences standing at the of the feild iwonder if i would be missed would any one take me seriously now they would have to.