Ms. Sue My paragraph is almost done. I did it on Microsoft Word. Also where would I put the contributions of these women, I really don't know where to put them, can you please help.
French women have always been politically active in times of disasters. They were the ones in charge for putting bread on the table, and during times of poverty, such as starvation, when bread was out of stock or worth a lot. However even in their toughest times; these women managed to survive and confront everything. The women helped with the French Revolution by demanding an end to bread shortage, and high prices of bread, by confronting the National Assembly and the king. Charlotte Corday helped with the French Revolution by sparing some Girondins from execution. Jeanne Roland helped with the French Revolution by establishing the republic, and ending the monarchy. The women also helped storm the Bastille. They took the king and queen to Paris where they and other royals were later beheaded. They also spoke out in favour of Liberte, Fraternite, Egalite.
Also please correct any sentences, that don't make sense, or that are messed up.
This is great, Sara. You've included the individual women in a good place.
really, have I also added the women's contributions in this paragraph as well?
One more thing, is there any ohter way I can end this paragraph.
If you know what Liberte, Fraternite, Egalite mean, then it's a great way to end your paragraph.
French women have always been politically active in times of disasters. They were the ones in charge for putting bread on the table, and during times of poverty, such as starvation, when bread was out of stock or worth a lot. However even in their toughest times; these women managed to survive and confront everything. The women helped with the French Revolution by demanding an end to bread shortage, and high prices of bread, by confronting the National Assembly and the king. Charlotte Corday helped with the French Revolution by sparing some Girondins from execution. Jeanne Roland helped with the French Revolution by establishing the republic, and ending the monarchy. The women also helped storm the Bastille. They took the king and queen to Paris where they and other royals were later beheaded. They also spoke out in favour of Liberte, Fraternite, and Egalite, a french for Liberty, fraternity, and equality.
Is this a good paragraph?
Yes. It's very good. Turn it in and I hope you get an A.
Thank You So Much Ms. Sue, you're the best:-)
You're welcome.
To properly include the contributions of these women in your paragraph, you can add a separate sentence or two highlighting their specific actions and achievements. Here's a suggestion:
"In addition to their active role in providing for their families during times of hardship, French women made significant contributions to the French Revolution. For instance, Charlotte Corday played a pivotal role by intervening to spare some Girondins from execution. Jeanne Roland was instrumental in establishing the republic and putting an end to the monarchy. These women also demonstrated their bravery and determination by participating in the storming of the Bastille, leading to the capture and subsequent execution of the king and queen along with other royals. Furthermore, they openly voiced their support for the principles of Liberte, Fraternite, Egalite."
By adding this information, you not only acknowledge the contributions of these women but also provide your readers with a clearer understanding of their roles in the French Revolution.