Can Someone comment on how well i did my my poem please.

Drive

No where to go
Nothing to see,
I just want to drive,
Drive away, you and me.

We don’t have to go fast
we can go slow
there is no first or last,
as long as you go.

My future with you
I have nothing to fear,
for you are my one true dear.
Here we go, you and me
Forever at last, together we’ll be.

1. How well does the poem use sound devices, such as rhyme, assonance, and/or alliteration?
2. Comment on how effective the concrete images are. Note whether or not the concrete images are balanced throughout the poem.

3. Comment on whether or not idioms, clichés, and/or dead metaphors are present in the poem.

4. Comment on your sense of the poem’s density.

5. Comment on point of view and its consistency of use.

6. Give your response to the poem as a whole and its effects for you as a reader.

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1. To analyze the use of sound devices in the poem, you can look for examples of rhyme, assonance, and alliteration. Rhyme refers to the repetition of similar sounds, usually at the end of lines. For example, in this poem, the rhyme between "go" and "me" in the first stanza and the rhyme between "slow" and "go" in the second stanza demonstrate the use of rhyme. Assonance refers to the repetition of vowel sounds, and alliteration refers to the repetition of consonant sounds. In this poem, you can examine whether any such repetition is present.

2. To assess the effectiveness of the concrete images in the poem, you should identify specific imagery used and evaluate how well it engages the senses and creates vivid mental pictures. For example, lines like "No where to go" and "Nothing to see" represent more abstract descriptions, while phrases like "I just want to drive" and "Drive away, you and me" provide a clearer image. Consider whether these concrete images are evenly distributed throughout the poem or if they seem to favor any particular section.

3. Idioms are phrases that have a figurative meaning different from their literal one, clichés are overused expressions, and dead metaphors are figures of speech that have lost their original impact. Analyze the language in the poem to determine if any idioms, clichés, or dead metaphors are present. Look for phrases or expressions that might be familiar or lacking in originality.

4. The density of a poem refers to the richness and complexity of its content. Consider whether the poem feels straightforward and easily digestible or if it presents layers of meaning and requires further exploration. Look for elements such as wordplay, symbolism, or multiple interpretations that contribute to the poem's density.

5. Analyze the point of view in the poem and assess whether it remains consistent throughout. Determine if the speaker's perspective remains the same or if there are shifts in how the speaker interacts with the world or other characters. This analysis can help evaluate the coherence of the narrative voice.

6. Responding to the poem as a reader is subjective, and your personal interpretation and emotional response will shape your understanding. Reflect on how the poem made you feel, what themes or emotions it evoked, and any personal connection or resonance you experienced. Consider the overall effect the poem had on you and how successful you believe it was in conveying its intended message or mood.