I finish it but don't know if it is right or wrong:

Can someone tell me what I do wrong please.
I use the first 12 line in the poem and my assignment was to, choose one of the following poems to imitate: "Black Hair," p. 68 (first person), "I Knew a Woman," p. 117-18 (first person), “To Aunt Rose,” p. 119-120 (first person), or "Life Cycle of Common Man," p. 121-22 (third person).

Use the same form (line length, stanza breaks, and indentations) but change the poem's content to reflect your wise mentor. Also, use the same point of view as your chosen model poem.

While writing and revising, seek the most precise word choices possible to convey your imagined wise old man, woman, or creature. Remember to use concrete images wherever possible. Be sure to note which poem you use as your model poem.



ENG311- Mentor Poem
Model Poem: "I Knew a Woman" by Theodore Roethke
I knew a woman, that look different inside and out,
While other talking, she stepped in the middle;
When she sand, everybody dropped what they were doing:
No one could take her place or fill her shoes!
She was great at everything she did,
The way she looked at me when she walked away playing with her hair
(She cried when she heard those words).

How well she played card! When they needed her,
She taught me to walk, how to love everyone around me;
She taught me to listen, how to love myself;
I waited in the room until she came out with good news
She was the light; I sun, I, was the world,

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Please reread ALL the corrections I made. Also, that last line is incomplete ... unfinished.