Renell's World Of Books
337 Hill Street
Opelousas, LA
1 June 2009
Mr Steven Richard
Manager of
Everything Books Manufacture
705 James St
New York, New York
Dear Mr Richard
Re. Order No. 768197
I am writing to inform you that the books we ordered from your company have not been supplied correctly.
On 28 May 2009 we placed an order with your company for 12,000 books. The consignment arrived yesterday but contained 1,000 of the books I ordered.
This error put our book store in a difficult position, as we had to make some emergency purchases to fulfill our commitments to all our customers. This caused us considerable inconvenience.
I am writing to ask you to please make up the shortfall immediately and to ensure that such errors do not happen again. Otherwise, we may have to look elsewhere for our supplies.
I look forward to hearing from you by return.
Yours sincerely
Renell. B
Renell. B
Store Owner
Is this better. this is a complaint letter. How did I do
It is mainly a matter of style, but if you are the store owner, you can be more direct:
....This error put my book store in a difficult position, as I had to make some emergency purchases to fulfill my commitments to my customers. This caused me considerable inconvenience.
I am awaiting your response on what happened, and how it is to be rectified quickly. I am still awaiting the remainder of the books. My operation depends on the efficient response of my suppliers, as I am certain you appreciate.
I anticipate your prompt response.
and one other thought....never make threats of cutting off a supplier or customer, they may not value you as much as you think. If it needs to be done, no warning is needed, and no apology is required.
BobPursley is right on with his suggestions, however, that is a MUCH better letter... good thinking.
Thanks so much.
Do I put sincerely Renell. B r something else?
You would sign your full name. However, do not post your full name here or any other place online.
Yeah I know.
So sincerely will do
Yes, I like "Sincerely" better than "Sincerely yours."
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In the first place, people enjoy the companionship of car. Cars can be helpful in many ways. The best thing they are good for is going places. It is good to know that you have your own car. Owning your own car means not having to call someone for a ride or walking. Using your own car means going where you want to go and how far you want to go.
In the second place, The kind of car you want. What is the make and model of the car you want Chevy Malibu or Nissan Rogue. Do you want your car to be a certain color. Red or blue. What year do your car have to be made in? 2000 car or maybe a 2008 car. What is your price range? 2,000 to 3,000 or 22,000 to 26,000.
Lastly, places to look when buying a car. There's the car section in the newspaper, the internet, and the phone book.
The car section in the newspaper supply you with the ability to look over cars, prices, the name of the business that's selling, and the number to contact them. The internet supply you with a lot of information on cars and sellers. Rather you want to buy locally or from somewhere a few miles down the road. The phone book helps with contact numbers of car dealers in the phone book. Locally mostly. It is best to know what you have so far locally before searching farther out that way you won't have to travel far.
When buying a car. Make sure that everything is right about the car. Bring someone along that knows about cars and how it should run. Get car insurance. You should have a drivers license before buying a car to show it as proof. A lot of decisions have to be made when buying a car.
this is Composition
Did I do it right?
Can I please get some help
Dear Renell,
Regarding your question about how you did on your complaint letter, I need to inform you that as an AI, I cannot fully evaluate the content of your letter. However, I can provide you with some guidance on how to improve your letter and make it more effective.
1. Begin with a clear and concise subject line: State the purpose of your letter, such as "Complaint about Incorrect Book Order - Order No. 768197."
2. Include a proper introduction: Start the letter by addressing the recipient, Mr. Steven Richard, and state your own details, such as your name, position, and business.
3. State the problem and provide necessary details: Clearly mention that the books you ordered were not supplied correctly and specify the quantity you expected versus what was received. In this case, you stated that you ordered 12,000 books but only received 1,000.
4. Explain the impact: Describe how this error affected your business, emphasizing the inconvenience caused and any additional costs you had to incur. In your case, you mentioned needing to make emergency purchases to fulfill your commitments to customers.
5. Request a solution: Politely ask the recipient to rectify the shortfall immediately and add a request to prevent such errors from happening in the future. Mention that you may consider looking for alternative suppliers if the issue persists.
6. Provide your contact details: Include your name, position, contact number, and email address, to make it easier for the recipient to respond.
7. Close the letter professionally: End the letter with a closing, such as "Yours sincerely," followed by your name and position.
Overall, your letter contains most of the necessary elements. However, you could improve it by adding more specific details about the impact of the error and the measures you would like the recipient to take.
I hope this guidance proves helpful to you. If you have any further questions or need any assistance, feel free to ask.
Sincerely,
Explain Bot