Homework Help: French (URGENT)

Posted by Larry on Friday, May 29, 2009 at 1:57am.

@ Sra, here is the short story with the corrections you suggested in my previous post.

Petit lapin n’était pas heureux comment il était. Il a voulu ressembler les autres animaux. Quand il a vu Mr. Bushy Tail, l’écureuil, il a voulu une queue qui ressemblait les écureuils. Ensuite il a vu Mr. Porcupine et il a voulu les piquants. Ensuite il est passé Mrs. Puddle-Duck et il a voulu des caoutchoucs rouges comme elle. Sage Mr. Groundhog l’a envoyé à l’arbre aux souhaits. Il a vu un petit oiseau rouge et a voulu des ailes rouges pendant qu’il a tourné (around) trois fois. Il a laissé pousser des ailes rouges. Sa mère, Mr. Bushy Tail, et Mrs. Puddle-duck ne le reconnaissent pas lui et ils ne le laissaient pas entrer. Sage Mr. Groundhog l’a laissé coucher avec lui, mais lapin était triste. Le prochaine jour il est retourné encore à l’arbre aux souhaits et l’a voulu ne pas avoir les ailes. Il est allé chez lui et sa mère l’a reconnu et il était heureux et jamais a voulu etre quelqu’un d’autre sauf lui-meme.

If there are anymore errros, please feel free to correct me.

Note: I didn't understand how to rewrite this part.

Il a vu un petit oiseau rouge et a voulu des ailes rouges pendant qu’il a tourné (around) trois fois.

Here was your suggestion
turned around = il s'est retourné or tourné

Merci Beaucoup!!!

French (URGENT) - SraJMcGin, Friday, May 29, 2009 at 2:11am
Why are you reposting what I just corrected?

Sra (aka Mme)
French (URGENT) - SraJMcGin, Friday, May 29, 2009 at 2:16am
One more time:

il a voulu une queue qui ressemblait les écureuils. = il a voulu une queue qui ressemblait celle des écureuils. (see note about comparing tail with tail, not tail with squirrel)

des caoutchoucs rouges comme elle. = des caoutchoucs rouges comme ceux d'elle (like those rubbers she has)

ne le reconnaissent pas lui = drop the word "lui" because you do not want BOTH direct and indirect objects referring to the same thing

et l’a voulu ne pas avoir les ailes. I = typo, you forgot the "i" in "et il a voulu , etc."

errros? (we are getting tired! "errors")

Il a vu un petit oiseau rouge et a voulu des ailes rouges pendant qu’il a tourné (around) trois fois. = I don't understand what you mean about "how to rewrite." Do you even WANT to rewirte? See prior correction where I gave you the English of what it says.

I'm off for the night.

Sra (aka Mme)
French (URGENT) - SraJMcGin, Friday, May 29, 2009 at 2:19am
P.S. Here is the prior correction:

http://www.jiskha.com/display.cgi?id=1243557426

Sra (aka Mme)

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