posted by Ashley on .
I need to write write an e-mail based on the following scenario (create it as a regular Word document , rather than as a"real" e-mail.
Your boss has asked you to set up a meeting with a client, Joceyln Talbot, for next Wednesday at 2:00 p.m. . He wants to meet at the King Charles Hotel on River Street and have a lunch meeting. He'll be taking along an assistant manager. Rory Webster, to share his ideas for the next project they're plannning. (note must be 6-10 sentences be sure to follow all the rules of grammar,spelling,usage,punctuation.
ok this what I so far.
Dear Ms. Joceyln Talbot
I am writing on behalf of my boss, Mr. Smith. He would like to set up a meeting with you for lunch next Wednesday at 2:00 PM at the King Charles Hotel on River Street. Mr. Smith will be accompanied by his assistant manager, Rory Wester. At the meeting Mr. Wester will share his ideas for the new project they are planning. I would appreciate it very much if could let me know if you are able to attend. Please respond as soon as possible.
Do you have any suggestions on how to improve?
First names are not usually used in salutations.
The first sentence is awkward. Simply this would be better:
Mr. _____ Smith, of _____ Company, wants to meet with you for lunch next Wednesday, June 3, 2009, at ...
What is this new project? Some specifics here would be good. Without those specifics, how do you know Ms. Talbot will agree to meet anyone?
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