Modifiers and Parallel Structure
posted by ROSE on .
What is the correct version in writing this sentence? The man is standing behind the woman and pulls on her short, blonde hair tilting her face up.
The problem is with the placement of "tilting her face up." In the current sentence, it reads as if the blonde hair were tilting her face up -- which is clearly impossible!
Who was doing the tilting? Put that phrase as close as possible to that noun.
How would you recommend to write this sentence?
When travelling at the speed of sound, the moon is approximately 320 hours