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This is my whole free verse poem. i hope it fully sends this time. could you please take a look at it

sitting on the beach

Sitting on the beach
watching the sun set,
It make me calm.
Sitting on the beach
watching people walking past,
holding hands.
Sitting on the beach
watching the changing tide,
while sitting on the beach.
listeniong to the seagulls call
sitting on the beach,
watching the sun rise.

  • language - ,

    I agree with GuruBlue's previous comment about your third line.

  • language - ,

    I see a few grammatical errors. In line three, the verb should be "makes" (add an "s" for third person pronouns). "Listening" is the correct spelling (not "listeniong").

    Also, you repeat "sitting on the beach" quite a bit. It's all right because it's poetry, but take a look at the third stanza:

    "Sitting on the beach / watching the changing tide, / while sitting on the beach."

    "Sitting on the beach" is especially repetitive in that stanza.

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