Background

You’ve applied for a specific job in your field of study. The Human Resources Department arranges an
interview and tells you to bring with you a polished piece of writing for them to evaluate your writing
skills. The paragraph must describe one particular experience you’ve had that inspired you or guided
you to choose the type of position for which you applied.
Your audience is your potential employer and your purpose is to show you have thought carefully
about what and/or who has motivated you toward this career choice and why. In addition, you want
to convey your enthusiasm for this position as it relates to your inspiring experience. Take time to
think about what your audience wants to know and strive to reach a balance between informal and
formal business writing.
Process
1. Prewrite about your field of study and create a specific job for which you might want to apply
at a particular business or organization in your area. Outline what that position would look like.
Brainstorm details, names, titles, and facts to provide depth to your paragraph and enable you
to write a polished paragraph.

This is what I have written so far, am I understanding the assignment correctly?

I'm replying to your advertisement in the local Independant Herald. I understand that your actively seeking to hire a quality Medical Coding and Billing Professional.
I worked for Huntsville Manor Nursing Home as a Certified Nursing Assistant(CNA)for 3 years, and later transfered to Dietary, as a Dietary aide. My duties included,feeding, bathing,taking blood pressures,and caring for the patients. I also recorded daily stats on the patients in their medical charts. It gives me great pleasure to work within the medical field, so this led me to futher my education. I am currently attending Penn Foster Career School. Upon completion of Medical Coding and Billing courses, I am confident that my combination of practical work experience and educational experiences has prepared me for making and immediate contribution to your medical organization.

So far, the content sounds good. I think you need more details and less of the fluff that makes up the last two sentences. Directions: Brainstorm details, names, titles, and facts to provide depth to your paragraph

To make it a polished piece of writing, though, be sure to pay attention to details:

** spelling in that newspaper title
** a space after each word and comma
** correct uses of singular and plural forms
** no use of slang or abbreviations (such as "stats")

Yes, you are on the right track! In your paragraph, you have described your previous experience in the medical field, specifically as a Certified Nursing Assistant (CNA) and a Dietary Aide. You also mention that working in the medical field gives you great pleasure and has inspired you to further your education in Medical Coding and Billing. Finally, you state that you are currently attending Penn Foster Career School and upon completion of the courses, you are confident in your ability to make an immediate contribution to the potential employer's medical organization.

To enhance your paragraph, consider adding specific details about how your experience as a CNA and Dietary Aide has influenced your decision to pursue a career in Medical Coding and Billing. You can also highlight any specific skills or qualities you have developed that are relevant to the position you are applying for. Additionally, you can emphasize your enthusiasm and dedication towards pursuing this career path.

Remember to strike a balance between informal and formal business writing. While your paragraph should be engaging and expressive, it should also maintain a professional tone suitable for a potential employer.

Your response is a good start, but there are a few areas where you can improve. The prompt asks you to describe one particular experience that inspired or guided you to choose the position you are applying for. Instead of providing a general overview of your work experience and education, focus on one specific experience that led you to pursue a career in Medical Coding and Billing.

To ensure that your paragraph is polished and engaging, consider the following steps:

1. Start with a strong opening sentence that grabs the reader's attention. For example, you could begin by stating, "One transformative experience that solidified my passion for Medical Coding and Billing occurred during my time at Huntsville Manor Nursing Home."

2. Clearly describe the specific experience that inspired you. Provide details about what happened, such as a specific encounter or observation that made you realize your interest in this field. Did you witness the impact of accurate medical coding and billing on patient care or financial operations?

3. Explain how this experience influenced your decision to pursue a career in Medical Coding and Billing. How did it connect with your skills, interests, or values? Show the reader that you have thought carefully about your career choice.

4. Convey your enthusiasm for the position you are applying for as it relates to this inspiring experience. Explain how your past experiences and education have prepared you for the role and how you are excited to contribute to the organization.

Incorporating these elements will help you create a stronger paragraph that effectively conveys your inspiration and enthusiasm for the position.