Write a memo of 6–15 sentences based on the scenario given here.
You’ve been put in charge of planning a one-day departmental training seminar
with Dr. Melanie Dobler as the speaker. You must make travel arrangements for the
speaker, reserve a company room large enough for the number of people attending,
and requisition any necessary items, such as a computer and screen for a PowerPoint
presentation, chairs, tables, and photocopies of training materials. In addition,
arrange for two breaks and a casual lunch.
This is what i have so far...
To: Karen Betty
From: Crystal Lawson, Department Manager
Date: February 03,2009
Subject: Training Seminar
This is to inform you of our one day departmental training seminar with Dr. Anna Dobler. I wanted to confirm the travel arrangements that I made with you on March 1,2009 for Mrs Dobler. I glad to know that you were able to obtain "Sun" room. which will easily accommodate the 75 people which will be attending. I was also checking on the requisition that I had sent you regarding the items that are needed such as a computer and screen for our PowerPoint presentation, along with enough tables and chairs and the photocopies of our training manuals.
Please feel free to call me at(304)-555-5335 ext. 5627 if you have any questions.
I don't know how to word it for the 2 breaks.
To: Karen Betty
From: Crystal Lawson, Department Manager
Date: February 03,2009
Subject: Training Seminar
This is to inform you of our one day departmental training seminar with Dr. Anna Dobler. I wanted to confirm the travel arrangements that I made with you on March 1,2009 for Mrs (Dr.) Dobler. Where will she stay? Hotel room?
Use new paragraph to indicate change in place, person, time or ideas.
I glad to know that you were able to obtain "Sun" room. which will easily accommodate the 75 people which (who) will be attending.
I was also checking on the requisition that I had sent you regarding the items that are needed such as a computer and screen for our PowerPoint presentation, along with enough tables and chairs and the photocopies of our training manuals. Do you have any specific way you want the materials to be set up? For example, might you want to have the seating with a center aisle,so projected image won't have the shadow of attendees heads on the screen?
Lunch is planned what? when? where? along with breaks when? Will refreshments be available during the breaks? If so, what will they be?
Please feel free to call me at (304)-555-5335 ext. 5627 if you have any questions.
I hope this helps. Thanks for asking.
"I glad to know that you were able to obtain "Sun" room. which will easily accommodate the 75 people which (who) will be attending."
In the sentence above, the main verb is missing, and the punctuation after "room" is incorrect. It should read, "I am glad to know that you were able to obtain "Sun" room, which will easily accommodate the 75 people who will be attending."
I redone it, can you please read over it and tell me if it is OK now... Thanks
To: Karen Betty
From: Crystal Lawson, Department Manager
Date: February 03,2009
Subject: Training Seminar
This is to inform you of our one day departmental training seminar with Dr. Anna Dobler. I wanted to confirm the travel arrangements that I made with you on March 1,2009 for Dr. Dobler at the Best Western Hotel.
I am glad to know that you were able to obtain "Sun" room, which will easily accommodate the 75 people who will be attending. I was also checking on the requisition that I had sent you regarding the items that are needed such as a computer and screen for our PowerPoint presentation, along with enough tables and chairs and the photocopies of our training manuals.
Could you please make sure there is a isle in the middle of the tables so the projector won’t have the heads of the attendees head on the screen. Also, we are planning on having a luncheon in the “Sun” room, at 11:00 AM. Could you check about a couple of meat and vegetable tray’s, along with some soda. Could you please schedule two breaks one at 2:00 PM for 10 minutes and one at 4:00 PM. Soda will be served at both breaks.
Please feel free to call me at(304)-555-5335 ext. 5627 if you have any questions
First of all, take a look at your first "sentence" up there (above the redone memo) -- please work on improving your grammar and writing in all phases of your life, formal or informal. "I redone it" -- if you speak like that, you immediately mark yourself as uneducated. Please work on these things.
Your redone memo:
To: Karen Betty
From: Crystal Lawson, Department Manager
Date: February 03,2009 <~~need a space after the comma
Subject: Training Seminar
This is to inform you of our one day departmental training seminar with Dr. Anna Dobler. I wanted to confirmDo these four words mean that you wanted to, but you aren't going to? How can you rephrase without "I wanted"? the travel arrangements that I made with you on March 1,2009<~~space after comma is needed for Dr. Dobler at the Best Western Hotel.
I am glad to know that you were able to obtain "Sun"<~~add "the" before "Sun" and delete the quotation marks room, which will easily accommodate the 75 people who will be attending. I was also checking<~~you were checking, but did you actually DO anything? on the requisition that I had sent you regarding the items that are needed such as a computer and screen for our PowerPoint presentation, along with enough tables and chairs and the photocopies of our training manuals.
Could you please make sure there is a isle<~~an aisle -- be sure to use the correct words in the middle of the tables so the projector won’t have the heads of the attendees head<~~delete "head" on the screen. Also, we are planning on having a luncheon in the “Sun”<~~delete quotation marks room, at 11:00 AM. Could you check about a couple of meat and vegetable tray’s<~~no apostrophe needed in standard plural forms, along with some soda.<~~This is a question; what punctuation do you need here? Could you please schedule two breaks<~~need comma here one at 2:00 PM for 10 minutes and one at 4:00 PM.<~~this is also a question Soda will be served at both breaks.
Please feel free to call me at(304)-<~~space after "at" is needed555-5335 ext. 5627<~~commas after the phone number and after the extension are needed if you have any questions <~~punctuation at the end of a sentence = ?