Posted by y912f on Sunday, February 1, 2009 at 1:05pm.
When did you write this?
Most successful students write a few paragraphs, let it sit for several hours, reread, edit/rewrite, and THEN show it to others for criticism.
Your assignment says to include "the important elements is my interpretation and supporting evidence." But I see very little interpretation or supporting evidence.
Example:
"The painting seems very interesting to me because I like the details in it."
Yet you do not name the details in the painting that are interesting to you. You have used slang ("freaky") to give your reaction, but then you refer to something that doesn't seem to be in the painting.
Read this carefully:
http://www.ccds.charlotte.nc.us/green/looking_and_writing_about_art.htm
Follow directions.
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