posted by Danielle on .
I need to re-write this sentence in a different light that would make it seem more correct. I am suppose to write it five different ways, I have written it in three other ways but I cannot come up with two more.
The sentence is:
Teen marketed films, try to apply different methods in an attempt to get teens to spend big buck, this is not right.
How can I rearrange this sentence or make it sound better?
Without seeing what you have already written, hopefully this will not be one of those!
It is not right that teen-marketed films try to apply different methods, in an attempt to get teens to spend big bucks. (bucks should be plural)
Teen-marketed films try to apply different methods, attempting to get teens to spend big bucks and this is not right.