Homework Help: Grammar

Posted by i love polka on Saturday, October 4, 2008 at 12:36pm.

how can i put this in a much better sentence?

Their acquaintance starts off unpleasantly but Elizabeth’s personality catches Mr. Darcy’s heart and finds himself attracted to her.

Grammar - Writeacher, Saturday, October 4, 2008 at 12:40pm
More concise language and construction. Try something like this:

Elizabeth and Mr. Darcy's acquaintance starts off pleasantly, but soon Mr. Darcy finds himself strongly attracted to Elizabeth because of her ____ personality.

(You determine the adjective you want to put in before "personality.")
- Grammar - justine, Saturday, October 4, 2008 at 7:20pm
  I think it's NICE .
Grammar - Writeacher, Saturday, October 4, 2008 at 12:41pm
[Well, that's not much more concise, but the clauses and phrases are less flip-floppy all over the place!]

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