Homework Help: English

Posted by Vic on Sunday, September 7, 2008 at 6:42am.

Can you suggest/comment on my poem?

Death and Liquorice

It is funny how everyone sees me,
As a looming ghost above their head
In fact we have never met before
Yet they still anticipate me with dread.

What I do I do as a professional
Employed by the great circle of life
Every human is my loyal customer
Including you, man and man’s wife.

At the time our paths do finally cross
We both know that the time has come
For you to part with the living world
And then my work with you is done.

Usually when I arrive you are lying
Upon your back, waiting and silent
Sometimes you scream blue murder
Which ever way, I remain indifferent.

In doing my job, I look for a colour,
one that suits the life you have led
the saddened are blue, the lonely grey
the unlucky purple, the angry red.

Liquorice black is my favourite colour
These people are the easiest to free
For emotionless, empty are their souls
They remind myself too much of me.

English - christina, Sunday, September 7, 2008 at 8:14am
really good but a little creepy. ya might wanna tone it down a little. its really good though
English - SraJMcGin, Sunday, September 7, 2008 at 9:48am
Thank you for using the Jiskha Homework Help Forum. The spelling you used for "liquorice" is a British variation of "licorice." That was interesting.
Main Entry: li·quo·rice
chiefly British variant of licorice

Is this what you really meant to say: "Which ever way?" Perhaps it is the space there. (Whichever...)

As for the poem, I think you did an outstanding job!

Sra
English - LORI, Sunday, September 7, 2008 at 9:58am
The Kenning technique- im not sure that i get this:
teacher: stepmother?
busdriver:
firemen:
television: information box
meatloaf:
police: law keepers
poptart: breakfast food
music: great noise
love:
computer: touch information
I dont know, any suggestions?
- English - SraJMcGin, Sunday, September 7, 2008 at 10:22am
  Please see the "new post" I just put up for you.
  
  Sra

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