`m writing a bio-poem. Is what I wrote below gramaticcaly correct? I`m not sure if the second part makes sense, the gallows part.
Who feels that he has been robbed of his faith in God and fellow human beings, exposed to the deepest inhumanity and that life has becomes as black as ‘Night’
Who fears that liberty has gone extinct, his family will cease to exist and that God is hanging from a gallows
If this is a poem, where are your line breaks?
"becomes" in the first part should be "become" (subject-verb agreement)
The gallows part doesn't make sense to me, but it might to others. It all depends on what you are trying to portray.
Thanks =)
To determine the grammatical correctness of your bio-poem, let's analyze the second part and consider the meaning of the gallows reference.
Grammatically, the second part of your poem appears to be correct. However, the mention of "God hanging from a gallows" may require further explanation.
In terms of the meaning, it seems that you are using the metaphor of a gallows to represent the loss of faith or the absence of God. A gallows is traditionally associated with execution, punishment, or death. By mentioning God hanging from a gallows, you are expressing a profound sense of despair and questioning the existence or role of a higher power.
Overall, the poem conveys a strong emotional impact.