Kate Chopin¡¦s stories are essentially about the struggle of freedom
Kate Chopin was one of the most individual and adventurous nineteenth century American writers. Throughout Kate Chopin¡¦s stories, she gave the readers a woman¡¦s view of how repressive and confining marriage can be for a woman, both spiritually and sexually through images of entrapment and freedom. From her stories we do not only learn how she illustrates in the nineteenth century was a difficult time for many women because of the domination of white men over them but we also learn how her social life can be reflected on her stories. In this essay, we are going to explore how the idea of freedom and entrapment develops in one of her masterpieces, ¡¥The Storm¡¦.
The Storm, by Kate Chapin, is a short story about two people that have an affair during a storm. The story involves two families, that of Bobinot, Calixta, and Bibi, and Alcee, Clarisse, and their babies. Calixta is at her house separated from her family due to the storm. Alcee is separated from his family because they are visiting another town. The storm brings Calixta and Alcee together and they have an affair. A storm can mean many things, both good and bad, and it is important to the story both symbolically and directly.
Kate Chopin uses several techniques to create the images of how freedom and entrapment affect Calixta and Alcee. First of all in section two, it is filled with images of entrapment in their marriage: ¡§She sat at a side window sewing furiously on a sewing machine.¡¨ This describes how long she has been unwillingly with this marriage. Chopin uses the word ¡§furiously¡¨ to indicate that the marriage is not going well for Calixta and showing that she has had enough of this marriage. This word creates a tense atmosphere which helps to develop the image of entrapment in this marriage. ¡§It began to grow dark, and suddenly realizing the situation she got up hurriedly and went about closing windows and doors.¡¨ This again, the writer, uses special words like ¡¥dark¡¦ and ¡¥closing window and doors¡¨ to create the effect of entrapment. The house is already dark but when the storm comes, the image shows even more entrapment appearances by the closing of windows and doors.
¡¥The Storm¡¦, as well as symbolizing the images of entrapment and freedom, she also plays with words and images. A storm, to most people, is seen as negative, referring to the actual, physical storm. However, in the story, it can represent a completely opposite impression. The storm can be thought to represent how an affair can affect a marriage. Kate Chopin does not only play with words and images in ¡¥The Storm¡¦; she also does that in one of her other masterwork, ¡¥The Dream of an Hour¡¦. In the first few paragraph of the story, we are told Mrs. Mallard¡¦s husband, Mr. Brently Mallard, has been involved in a railroad disaster and in the list of killed. Yet again, she plays with this imagery. For a lot of people, if someone of their family dies, naturally they will feel upset and sad. However
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Kate Chopin¡¦s stories are essentially about the struggle of freedom <~~needs to be more concise
Kate Chopin was one of the most individual and adventurous nineteenth century American writers. Throughout Kate Chopin’s stories, she gave the readers a woman’s view of how repressive and confining marriage can be for a woman, both spiritually and sexually through images of entrapment and freedom. From her stories<~~add comma we do<~~ delete “do” not only learn how she illustrates in<~~change “in” to “that” the nineteenth century was a difficult time for many women because of the domination of white men over them<~~add comma but we also learn how her social life can be reflected on her stories. In this essay, we are going to explore how the idea of freedom and entrapment develops in one of her masterpieces, “The Storm.” <~~How can you rephrase that last sentence without writing “In this essay, we are going to explore”?
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Kate Chopin uses several techniques to create the images of how freedom and entrapment affect Calixta and Alcee. First of, section two is filled with images of entrapment in their<~~whose? marriage: “She sat at a side window sewing furiously on a sewing machine.” This describes how long she has been unwillingly with this marriage<~~what?. Chopin uses the word “furiously” to indicate that the marriage is not going well for Calixta and showing that she has had enough of this marriage. This word creates a tense atmosphere which helps to develop the image of entrapment in this marriage. “It began to grow dark, and suddenly realizing the situation she got up hurriedly and went about closing windows and doors.” This again, the writer, <~~delete commas and straighten out wording uses special words, such as “dark” and “closing window and doors” to create the effect of entrapment. The house is already dark<~~add comma but when the storm comes, the image shows even more entrapment appearances by the closing of windows and doors.
“The Storm,” <~~delete the title, insert the author’s last name, and rephrase slightly as well as symbolizing the images of entrapment and freedom, she also plays with words and images. A storm, to most people, is seen as negative, referring to the actual, physical storm. However, in the<~~change “the” to “this” story, it can represent a completely opposite impression. The storm can be thought to represent how an affair can affect a marriage. This is a whole new topic – referring to a different story; it’s not mentioned in your thesis statement or introduction; many changes need to be made, including starting a new paragraph here~~> Kate Chopin not only plays with words and images in “The Storm,” but she also does that in one of her other masterwork<~~add “s”, “The Dream of an Hour.” <~~Notice the period BEFORE the quotation marks. In the first few paragraph<~~?? of the story, we are told Mrs. Mallard’s husband, Mr. Brently Mallard, has been involved in a railroad disaster and in the list of people killed. Yet again, she<~~who? The author or the character? plays with this imagery. For a lot of people, if someone of their family dies, naturally they will feel upset and sad. However unfinished
the title: i was told to use that by my teacher so... thank you for your advice anyway...
Some bit i have corrected but some i don't understand.
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Kate Chopin’s stories are essentially about the struggle of freedom
Kate Chopin was one of the most individual and adventurous nineteenth century American writers. Throughout Kate Chopin’s stories, she gave the readers a woman’s view of how repressive and confining marriage can be for a woman, both spiritually and sexually through images of entrapment and freedom. From her stories, we not only learn how she illustrates that the nineteenth century was a difficult time for many women because of the domination of white men over them, but we also learn how her social life can be reflected on her stories. In this essay, we are going to explore how the idea of freedom and entrapment develops in one of her masterpieces, ‘The Storm’.
“The Storm,” by Kate Chopin, is a short story about two people who have an affair during a storm. The story involves two families, that of Bobinot, Calixta, and Bibi, and Alcee, Clarisse, and their babies. Calixta is at her house separated from her family because of the storm. Alcee is separated from his family because they are visiting another town. The storm brings Calixta and Alcee together, and they have an affair. A storm can mean many things, both good and bad, and it is important to the story both symbolically and directly.
Kate Chopin uses several techniques to create the images of how freedom and entrapment affect Calixta and Alcee. With the opening section of the story, it is already filled with entrapment shown by Bobinot: “Mama’ll be ‘fraid, yes,” Bibi suggests. Bobinot in respend says “She’ll shut the house…” By this sentence, it gives, to the reader, an initial idea of how the relationship between the two characters is. Bobinot has shown no worry about the storm, which represents the marriage. Whereas, Bibi, show a great deal of braveness by laying “his little hand on his father’s knee and was not afraid.”. Secondly in section two, it is filled with images of entrapment in their marriage: “She sat at a side window sewing furiously on a sewing machine.” This describes how long she has been unwillingly with this marriage. Chopin uses the word “furiously” to indicate that the marriage is not going well for Calixta and showing that she has had enough of this marriage. This word creates a tense atmosphere which helps to develop the image of entrapment in this marriage. “It began to grow dark, and suddenly realizing the situation she got up hurriedly and went about closing windows and doors.” This again the writer uses special words such as ‘dark’ and ‘closing window and doors” to create the effect of entrapment. Calixta is already entrapped in the dark house (marriage) but when the storm comes, the image shows even more entrapment appearances by the closing of the windows and doors.
Chopin does not only symbolize the images of entrapment and freedom, she also plays with words and images. A storm, to most people, is seen as negative, referring to the actual, physical storm. However, in this story, it can represent a completely opposite impression. The storm can be thought to represent how an affair can affect a marriage. Kate Chopin not only play with words and images in ‘The Storm’; she also does that in one of her other masterworks, ‘The Dream of an Hour’. In the first few paragraphs of the story, we are told Mrs. Mallard’s husband, Mr. Brently Mallard, has been involved in a railroad disaster and in the list of people killed. Yet again, she plays with this imagery. For a lot of people, if someone of their family dies, naturally they will feel upset and sad. However
Instead of this -- In this essay, we are going to explore how the idea of freedom and entrapment develops in one of her masterpieces, ‘The Storm’. -- you need to write a position statement without the 3rd-gradish approach that includes In this essay, we are going to explore.
Try this for the last sentence in your introduction (otherwise known as your thesis statement):
Kate Chopin clearly develops the ideas of freedom and entrapment in one of her masterpieces, "The Storm."
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Here's a question for you? Why are you including "The Story of an Hour" in this paper? (And note that it's "The Story..." not "The Dream...")
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"The Dream of an Hour" or "The Story of an Hour" it's just an alternative:
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I'm sorry forget to tell you that i have to include and compare examples from "Lilacs", "Desiree's Baby" and "The Dream of an Hour".
I can't be bother to type the whole assignment out as it is an A4 size writing.
Please feel free to correct more as i think there is a lot of mistakes and i want to get a excellent grade.
I will update later as i write more.
So far, please can you suggest what grade i will get?
Thank you very much for your time!!
How to suggest a grade for you? The following things must be known:
1. What is the EXACT prompt you were given.
2. What level of study is this.
3. What is your teacher's rubric.
There are all sorts of rubrics but a standard English rubric (if this is an English class) might be something like this, if, for example, it were a 6 point scale.
6. - Excellent content and grammar.
5. - Good or well done.
4. - Average.
3. - Basic - missing some points.
2. - Substandard.
1. - Poor
0 - Off topic or did not follow the prompt.
According to Sra's rubric above (which is accurate), I'd give your paper a 2 or maybe a 2+.
~~Thesis statement is not complete.
~~Inability to make corrections already pointed out, such as punctuation, etc.
~~Unfinished paper