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In the research analysis paper I will write about black women and their oppression. I will focus on how black women have overcome oppression and look at women in power such as Oprah, Condalisa Rice, and other.
The body of the paper will work to prove my thesis and support my thesis with several developed paragraphs using quotes from “The Combahee River Collective”. I will use their argument that “sexism and racism are interlocked”. I will refer to pop culture, which primarily involves black men such as the rap music industry and how it continues to be extremely sexist and portrays fundamental ideas and assumptions that help to create every day understanding of black women, thereby, contribute to the oppression of black women.

I am unfamiliar with “The Combahee River Collective.”

Relatively few black women have "overcome oppression." That is why these few stand out so much.

Black women are dealing with the combined aspects of both racism and sexism. Rap music is only one factor contributing to negative stereotypes of black women. Some of the oppression comes from black women accepting the stereotypes and passing them on to their children. Of course, you need to include the racism and sexism of some members of various non-black groups.

I searched Google under the key words "prejudice 'black women'" to get these possible sources:

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http://theangryblackwoman.wordpress.com/2008/02/14/a-black-woman-contemplates-breaking-up-with-feminism/
http://digitalcommons.unl.edu/cgi/viewcontent.cgi?article=1038&context=pocpwi6
http://hamptonroads.com/node/228611
http://psychologytoday.com/articles/pto-19990501-000005.html
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http://books.google.com/books?id=1Sdj80xO-VgC&pg=PA340&lpg=PA340&dq=prejudice+%22black+women%22&source=web&ots=h-JG0ghpTx&sig=7gRmb4iNbNrgNx13ZFEAZT9nyrI&hl=en

Even if you are going to limit your research to the effects of rap music, you still need to acknowledge other sources of the oppression of black women.

I hope this helps. Thanks for asking.

I would be happy to help you revise your research analysis paper. Here's a revised version of your paragraph:

In my research analysis paper, I will examine the oppression faced by Black women and how they have overcome it. Specifically, I will focus on influential Black women in positions of power, such as Oprah Winfrey and Condoleezza Rice, to highlight their achievements and accomplishments. To support my thesis, I will refer to "The Combahee River Collective," which argues that sexism and racism are deeply interconnected. I will use quotes from this work to reinforce my points in several well-developed paragraphs. Additionally, I will explore the influence of pop culture, particularly the rap music industry, and its perpetuation of extreme sexism. By discussing these cultural influences, I aim to demonstrate how they shape societal perceptions of Black women and contribute to their ongoing oppression.

I hope this revision helps! Let me know if you have any further questions or if there's anything else I can assist you with.