Posted by judy on Tuesday, February 26, 2008 at 5:15pm.
Making the decision to return to school was not an easy decision; however, returning to school will create a better future for my family and I. Although seeking to attain a college degree while having to work full-time and raise children, will be a defininte challenge, this challenge will be worth it (try to find a better word than "it" though...if that doesn't work for you so much) to ensure a brighter future for all of us.
Learning new skills and knowledge is required everyday in my job. At present, I am not eligible for promotions due to not holding the necessary college degree. Also, when I try to compete with others for jobs that do not require a college degree, the other applicants have some type of formal education on their résumés that outweighs my background. I desire to attain a college degree so that I am able compete with others for the positions for which I am qualified. Today’s employment market is filled with talented people who have various degrees, speak multiple languages, and have varying experience levels. Without a degree, it will become more difficult as I grow older to find a position I not only enjoy but one that also provides for my family.
1. MY EDUCATIONAL GOALS
I am not sure if this is to be an actual "formal" letter for a very specific reason...but, I have rearranged just a few areas. Check to see if those help somewhat.
Perhaps someone else will also be able to add/edit your piece further. If this letter is being written in hopes of being selected for post-secondary Ed, of some sort, perhaps throw in the words that show desire & dedication or persistence. If the above is a formal letter, try not to bring what others have over you quite as much, especially if it for applying to further you education. Just sell yourself. Somewhere you "may" have wanted to state about furthering your education in hopes of....etc...rather than just calling school "school".
take out "Making" at the beginning, also. Just begin with "The decision".
Take out the comma I put in after children & before will in the 2nd sent.
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