Im writing a diary entry for the events leading up to WWII. Could someone please edit it. I'm not sure if my information is 100% correct.
September 12th 1939
Great Britain had declared war on Germany on September 3rd subsequent to Germany’s invasion into Poland. Even though Canada was its own independent country, there was diminutive uncertainty that she would quickly follow. September 10th 1939, CBC had given word that King George the 5th had announced that Canada had also declared war. It was certainly no surprise. Although Germany’s invasion into Poland is what finally triggered this war, the accountability of the events leading up to the war, can be equally divided. Firstly, the strategy of appeasement took place when Great Britain and France granted concessions to Germany resulting in the Munich Pact. This agreement gave Hitler the Sudetenlands and control over Czechoslovakia as long as Hitler would agree to not expand further. Hitler quickly violated the terms of the agreement as the Nazis seized Czechoslovakia and a part of Poland known as Blitzkrieg. It became palpable to everyone that appeasements should never be given to tyrants. Expansionism due to the nationalistic goals of re-unification of former territories lost in WWI was not prevented by the League of Nations. After Hitler became chancellor of Germany, things started to a take a turn for the worst. Fascism began to shape the country into an anti-Semitic nation. This resulted in the mass extermination of Jewish peoples as well as Communists, Slavs, Poles, Gypsies, homosexuals and those people who were mentally challenged. We remember this atrocious time period as the Holocaust. Fascism was also practiced in other countries as well as anti-Semitism. I am sad to say that Canada was one of those many countries. Isolation, Militarism, Nationalism, Racism, and the failure of the League of Nations to enforce the Treaty of Versailles and maintain peace around the world, were several other causes of this war. Today, I enlisted in war with thousands of others. I believe that serving your nation is a great passage to manhood. I leave my family in a couple of weeks. My wife, Linda, is very proud of me, but it is hard to say goodbye to my son, Shamus. He has just learned to walk and talk, it’s sad that I will have to miss all of this. But this is just a small sacrifice everyone must make in order to bring peace to the world. I would rather die an honorable death than live a dishonorable life.
I'm in the process of editing this and should be finished within a half hour.
Thanks so much
You've written a good diary entry. However, I have a few suggestions below. Sorry it took me longer than expected to read this, but a phone call interrupted me.
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Hitler quickly violated the terms of the agreement as the Nazis seized Czechoslovakia and a part of Poland in a military operation known as Blitzkrieg.
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This resulted in the mass extermination of Jewish peoples as well as Communists, Slavs, Poles, Gypsies, homosexuals and those people who were mentally challenged. We remember this atrocious time period as the Holocaust.
We knew very little about what the Nazis were doing to the Jews, Communists, etc. in 1939. We knew they were persecuted by gangs and sometimes by the government. The mass extermination, though, hadn't started yet, and the term Holocaust wasn't used until after the war. I suggest you delete these sentences.
can i still keep the facism and anit-Semetic nation part in there?
You're very welcome.
Yes. Germany and other countries were clearly anti-semitic and fascist at that time.
Thanks again, you helped so much. =]
You're welcome. I should point out that the U.S. and Canada entered the war because we were afraid if Germany won the war in Europe, that he'd attack us. In addition to our friendships with Britain and other European countries, we also depended heavily on them for trade and alliances.
September 12th, 1939
Great Britain declared war on Germany on September 3rd, following Germany's invasion of Poland. As an independent country, Canada was expected to join the war effort shortly after. On September 10th, 1939, the CBC announced that King George V had declared war, making Canada's involvement official. This decision did not come as a surprise. While Germany's invasion of Poland was the immediate trigger of the war, the events leading up to it can be attributed to several factors.
One of the leading factors was the strategy of appeasement, which took place when Great Britain and France granted concessions to Germany through the Munich Pact. This agreement allowed Hitler to annex the Sudetenland region of Czechoslovakia in exchange for his commitment not to seek further expansion. However, Hitler violated the terms of the agreement by seizing not only the rest of Czechoslovakia but also a part of Poland in a campaign known as Blitzkrieg. It became clear that appeasement had failed and that tyrants should not be appeased.
Additionally, the League of Nations, which was established to maintain peace after World War I, failed to prevent Germany's expansionist aspirations driven by nationalistic goals of reclaiming lost territories. The League did not effectively enforce the Treaty of Versailles and was unable to prevent the rise of fascism under Hitler's leadership in Germany. Fascism promoted anti-Semitism, which eventually led to the Holocaust, the mass extermination of Jews, as well as other groups such as Communists, Slavs, Poles, Gypsies, homosexuals, and the mentally challenged. Unfortunately, Canada was not immune to the influence of fascism and anti-Semitism.
Isolationism, militarism, nationalism, racism, and the League of Nations' failure to maintain global peace were other causes that contributed to the outbreak of World War II. Today, I made the decision to enlist in the war, joining thousands of others. Serving one's nation is considered a significant passage to manhood, and I believe that it is a small sacrifice I must make to bring peace to the world. It is heartbreaking to say goodbye to my family, particularly my wife Linda and our son Shamus, who is just starting to walk and talk. However, I would rather die with honor than live a dishonorable life.
Please note that this is just a brief explanation of the events leading up to World War II and the content of your diary entry. For a more thorough review and editing of your diary entry, it may be helpful to consult with someone knowledgeable in history or writing.