Posted by Anonymous on Friday, December 7, 2007 at 12:02am.
Can you proofread my letter? Thanks!
December 7, 2007
Dear President of the Math Company,
I am pleased to inform you that a company that has 11 mathematicians on its staff and 2 or fewer women is possible. In fact, based on my stimulation, the probability that there are 2 or fewer women in a randomly selected group of 11 mathematicians is 10%. As you can see, there may be companies that fall below the expected 40% of women mathematicians. You must understand that some companies have more or less than 40% women mathematicians. Furthermore, the 40% comes from the average of the proportion of women hired in all the companies in the United States. The proportion of women mathematicians hired in one company is no representation of the whole population. I hope the content of this letter provide the answer you need.
Sincerely,
Anonymous

To any Jishka/stats or english tutor  Anonymous, Friday, December 7, 2007 at 1:47am
I need help editing this letter.

proofread letter  Anonymous, Friday, December 7, 2007 at 2:55am
I am pleased to inform you that a company that has 11 mathematicians on its staff and 2 or fewer women is possible. In fact, based on my simulation, the probability that there are 2 or fewer women in a randomly selected group of 11 mathematicians is 10%. As you can see, there may be companies that fall below the expected 40% of women mathematicians. You must understand that some companies have more or less than 40% women mathematicians. As my stimulation shows, 45% companies hired 4 or less women mathematicians, which is less than 40%. Moreover, 55% companies hired 5 or more women mathematicians, which is more than 40%. Furthermore, the 40% comes from the average of the proportion of women hired in all the companies in the United States. The proportion of women mathematicians hired in one company is no representation of the whole population. Certainly, my simulation does not represent the whole population. It only serves as an illustration of a possible outcome. I hope the content of this letter provides the answer you need.

proofread letter  Writeacher, Friday, December 7, 2007 at 8:02am
Use words instead of numerals for numbers that are one or two words (except when stating percentages).
http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/numbers.htm
Use commas in compound sentences.
http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/commas.htm
See #2.
Doublecheck word choice  you mean simulation, not stimulation, right?
55% of companies (omitted word of here and in other places)
"4 or less women..." should be "four or fewer women... "
http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/adjectives.htm#less
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