Posted by Student - HELP! on Monday, November 26, 2007 at 4:14pm.
the we sounds like its in the wrong tense or something.
The "we" sounds wrong because there's a shift in the sentence from 3rd person to 1st. How can you rephrase it and get rid of "we"? What would you substitute?
we -> each of us?
still doesnt sound right
We all came from different backgrounds and social classes, but were all bound together by the music we practiced. Thanks@
We all came from different backgrounds and social classes, but related to each other through the music we practiced.
something seems wrong
I think it's fine. The only other way would be to turn it all into 3rd person, but it's not as smooth as what you've written.
Each person in the choir came from a different background and social class, but all were bound together by the music they practiced.
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Ahhhh, good for you!
=)
nm thanks. sorry for spamming
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