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Excerpt from Night
He reached the first cauldron. Hearts raced: he had succeeded. Jealousy consumed us burned us up like straw. We never thought for a moment of admiring him. Poor hero, committing suicide for a ration of soup! In our thoughts we were murdering him.
Wiesel tends to avoid the use of conjunctions between idependent clauses and phrases. Therefore, the prose has a choppy, disjointed quality.
1. Why is this the effect he is trying to create?
2. Join as many of the sentences with conjunctions as you can. What about the rhetorical effect now?
Please let us know what YOU think the answers are (and you might keep in mind that there is probably no ONE right answer!), and someone here will be glad to critique your thinking.
for number 9, I think Wiesel is trying to add drama, trying to convey the scene in the way he writes the sentence.
and for number 10, I think it reads more smoothly now.
Yes, Eli Wiesel was adding drama to his account based on his horrifying experiences.
If you add conjunctions, it reads more smoothly. But does Wiesel want you to read it smoothly? Doesn't he want you to have a taste of the chaos and confusion he experience?
Yes, that's what I needed thank you for you help. It helped me alot!
You're very welcome. :-)