The senate has important jobs that not many people know about. One of them is to disapprove or approve any piece of government legislation; with the help of the House of Commons. As well the senates investigate political and social issues that Canada faces. Over the past years the senates have investigated poverty, aging, unemployment, the mass media, science policy, land use, national defense, Canadian-American relations, constitutional affairs, the decriminalization of marijuana, health care system and much more. As well the senates offer a voice to the provinces. So if someone says that senate’s have no real job then they should investigate and find the truth, because without the senate’s the government would not be what it has become today.

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The senate has important jobs that not many people know about. One of them is to disapprove or approve any piece of government legislation; with the help of the House of Commons. As well the senates investigate political and social issues that Canada faces. Over the past years the senates have investigated poverty, aging, unemployment, the mass media, science policy, land use, national defense, Canadian-American relations, constitutional affairs, the decriminalization of marijuana, health care system and much more. As well the senates offer a voice to the provinces. So if someone says that senate’s have no real job then they should investigate and find the truth, because without the senate’s the government would not be what it has become today.

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http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Canadian_Senate
There is only one Senate in Canada. Please make the appropriate corrections.

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1)I would capitalize Senate.
2) Do not use a semi colon after legislation.
3) Use a comma after "As well, the Senate"
4) I would change "over the past years) to Previous Senates
5) You have already used "as well" maybe Additionally would be a good choice here.
6) Use Therefore, instead of So;
again, capitalize Senates ( no apostrophe); comma after "job". Put a period after truth. You have a run-on sentence.
7. Leave out because, capitalize "Without" , Capitalize Senate, no apostrophe, use a comma after Senate.

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Answer 1

The Senate has important jobs that not many people know about. One of them is to approve or disapprove any piece of government legislation, with the help of the House of Commons. Additionally, the Senate investigates political and social issues that Canada faces. Previous Senates have investigated poverty, aging, unemployment, the mass media, science policy, land use, national defense, Canadian-American relations, constitutional affairs, the decriminalization of marijuana, health care system, and much more. Additionally, the Senate offers a voice to the provinces. Therefore, if someone says that the Senate has no real job, they should investigate and find the truth, because without the Senate, the government would not be what it has become today.

To find more information about the Senate's role in Canada, you can visit the Wikipedia page on the Canadian Senate (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Canadian_Senate).