I applied my first choice collegefor 2007 Fall admission. But they gave me summer admission finally, which I don't want to get. So I decide to write an appeal letter to the admission office asking for fall admission.

The reason why I want them to reconsider me for fall admission because I have updated grades, since my high school made some errors in my transcript which may affect my admission. And I have significant improvement in my senior year. Also, I won a 2nd place award in my county after they made my admission decision. And I visited the school few weeks ago, joined their accepted students reception when their representitives came to my state as well. Because I am accepted to engineering school, so the school is more attactive to me.
I want to know how can I write this letter to state the above reasons offically and appropriately? Could anyone help me to write a paragraph or something like that?

Thanks for your help!

You have a lot of good arguments that may help the college reconsider its decision.

If you post your paragraph here, someone will be glad to help yourevise it.

Thanks.
I posted my draft letter in a later post.

Dear [Admission Office],

I hope this letter finds you well. I am writing to respectfully appeal the decision regarding my admission for the 2007 Fall term at [College Name]. I understand that I have been offered summer admission, but I would like to request that you reconsider my application for fall admission. I firmly believe that there are compelling reasons that warrant reevaluation of my admission status.

Firstly, there have been significant updates to my academic record since the initial submission of my application. Unfortunately, my high school made errors on my transcript which mistakenly reflected poorly on my academic performance. However, these errors have since been rectified, and with the correct grades now accurately reflected, my academic standing has significantly improved.

Furthermore, I am delighted to share that I recently garnered a 2nd place award in my county, an achievement that was accomplished after your initial admission decision. This accomplishment showcases my dedication to my academics and exemplifies the potential I have to contribute to [College Name]'s academic community.

In addition to my academic achievements, I have also actively engaged with [College Name] by attending the accepted students reception during your representatives' visit to my state. This visit allowed me to interact with current students, faculty, and staff, which further solidified my commitment and enthusiasm for the engineering program at [College Name]. My experience during the reception only increased my desire to be part of the prestigious academic environment that [College Name] offers.

I sincerely hope that you will reconsider my application for fall admission. Given the updated grades, recent achievements, and genuine interest in [college name], I believe I would be a valuable addition to the incoming class. Thank you for considering my appeal. I eagerly await your response.

Yours sincerely,

[Your Name]