Hi! I wrote in here a few days ago about my thesis. I was wondering if I could get some feedback on my intro and conclusion. I think Im just about done with my essay, with the exception of these two portions. Thanks!
Intro:
The riddles in A Feast of Creatures historically represent and exemplify the importance of the vernacular texts and its significance amongst the great literary artists, such as Emily Dickinson. The mechanics and purpose of deepening the reader’s perspective on society, the world, and the subject itself is well developed throughout the three pieces examined. This comparison gives validity to the vernacular texts as a whole; from children’s rhymes to riddles written in old English, they are each significant in the world of poetry and literature. The purpose of a poem is not only for simple pleasure and entertainment, the purpose of these particular poems are a riddle within a riddle. The three poems of discussion included a riddle not blatantly exposing the answer, another hinting the answer by giving the letters, and one that gave the answer in the riddle itself. The three have different approaches to riddling the reader, but they all have the same effect. Though the broadened, or deepened, perception on the world may have differed from reader to reader, the riddles purpose was still seen through: for the reader to gain understanding. One’s purpose in life may still be an inscrutable and mysterious matter for now; and thus, meaning that life is similar to the Sphinx. As Oedipus solved the riddle of the Sphinx, individuals must solve the riddle of purpose in life.
Conclusion:
The riddles in A Feast of Creatures historically represent and exemplify the importance of the vernacular texts and its significance amongst the great literary artists, such as Emily Dickinson. The mechanics and purpose of deepening the reader’s perspective on society, the world, and the subject itself is well developed throughout the three pieces examined. This comparison gives validity to the vernacular texts as a whole; from children’s rhymes to riddles written in old English, they are each significant in the world of poetry and literature. The purpose of a poem is not only for simple pleasure and entertainment, the purpose of these particular poems are a riddle within a riddle. The three poems of discussion included a riddle not blatantly exposing the answer, another hinting the answer by giving the letters, and one that gave the answer in the riddle itself. The three have different approaches to riddling the reader, but they all have the same effect. Though the broadened, or deepened, perception on the world may have differed from reader to reader, the riddles purpose was still seen through: for the reader to gain understanding. One’s purpose in life may still be an inscrutable and mysterious matter for now; and thus, meaning that life is similar to the Sphinx. As Oedipus solved the riddle of the Sphinx, individuals must solve the riddle of purpose in life.
The main focus of the essay are the three riddles. My teacher didn't like my first introduction and said I needed to stick to the three riddles and be specific. He said I could have the sphinx story, just not taking up the whole intro. So how does this look? Comments critiques are greatly appreciated!
Intro:
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Conclusion:
The riddles in A Feast of Creatures historically represent and exemplify the importance of the vernacular texts and its significance amongst the great literary artists, such as Emily Dickinson. The mechanics and purpose of deepening the reader’s perspective on society, the world, and the subject itself is well developed throughout the three pieces examined. This comparison gives validity to the vernacular texts as a whole; from children’s rhymes to riddles written in old English, they are each significant in the world of poetry and literature. The purpose of a poem is not only for simple pleasure and entertainment, the purpose of these particular poems are a riddle within a riddle. The three poems of discussion included a riddle not blatantly exposing the answer, another hinting the answer by giving the letters, and one that gave the answer in the riddle itself. The three have different approaches to riddling the reader, but they all have the same effect. Though the broadened, or deepened, perception on the world may have differed from reader to reader, the riddles purpose was still seen through: for the reader to gain understanding. One’s purpose in life may still be an inscrutable and mysterious matter for now; and thus, meaning that life is similar to the Sphinx. As Oedipus solved the riddle of the Sphinx, individuals must solve the riddle of purpose in life.
The conclusion cannot simply be a repetition of the introduction. You want to echo the intro, but not repeat it verbatim.
http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/composition/endings.htm
http://leo.stcloudstate.edu/acadwrite/conclude.html
http://nutsandbolts.washcoll.edu/ending.html
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Intro:
The riddles in A Feast of Creatures historically represent and exemplify the importance of vernacular texts. They hold significance among great literary artists, such as Emily Dickinson. Through examining three specific riddles, we can understand how these texts deepen the reader's perspective on society, the world, and the subject itself. From children's rhymes to riddles written in old English, each of these poems is significant in the world of poetry and literature. These particular poems serve as a riddle within a riddle, with each one taking a different approach to engaging the reader. While the broadened perception of the world may vary from reader to reader, the purpose of these riddles remains constant: to provide understanding. Just as Oedipus solved the riddle of the Sphinx, individuals must also solve the riddle of purpose in life.
Conclusion:
The riddles in A Feast of Creatures demonstrate the importance of vernacular texts and their significance in both poetry and literature. Through the examination of these three riddles, we have seen how they enhance the reader's understanding of society, the world, and the subject matter. Whether it is a riddle that withholds the answer, one that hints at it, or one that reveals it within the riddle itself, these poems all serve to deepen our perception. While the interpretation of these riddles may differ among readers, their purpose remains the same: to help us gain understanding. The enigmatic nature of life, akin to the Sphinx, prompts us to unravel the riddle of our own purpose.