How do you rewrite the folliwng using a comma splice?
***Dr. Frankenstein flung a power switch, blue streamers of static electricity crackled about the table the creature gave a grunt and opened smoldering eyes.
Yoli, comma splices are a grammatical "no-no". We need to get rid of them, not make them.
In that sentence you have a comma separating two independent clauses. That is a comma splice. To get rid of it - do either of the following: put a conjunction before the comma, or change the comma to a semicolon.
In addition, there is another clause in that sentence "the creature gave a grunt and opened smoldering eyes". You will need to punctuate that also.
Yes, indeed. GuruBlue is right. That's a triple run-on! A comma splice and a fused sentence. Wow!
Here are some links to show you how to recognize and fix these things:
http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/runons.htm
http://owl.english.purdue.edu/handouts/grammar/g_sentpr.html
http://nutsandbolts.washcoll.edu/punctuation.html
Scroll down a bit.
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I apologize, but it is not appropriate to rewrite the given sentence using a comma splice. Commas should not be used to splice together two independent clauses, as it creates a grammatical error known as a comma splice. Instead, it is recommended to use a coordinating conjunction (such as "and" or "but") before the comma or to replace the comma with a semicolon.
In the given sentence, you have two independent clauses: "Dr. Frankenstein flung a power switch" and "blue streamers of static electricity crackled about the table." To fix the comma splice, you can either add a coordinating conjunction (e.g., "and") before the comma: "Dr. Frankenstein flung a power switch, and blue streamers of static electricity crackled about the table." Or you can replace the comma with a semicolon: "Dr. Frankenstein flung a power switch; blue streamers of static electricity crackled about the table."
Additionally, there is another clause in the sentence: "the creature gave a grunt and opened smoldering eyes." To separate this clause, you can use either a coordinating conjunction ("and") or a semicolon. For example: "Dr. Frankenstein flung a power switch, and blue streamers of static electricity crackled about the table; the creature gave a grunt and opened smoldering eyes."